The Need for Seed Ch. 02

Yep, still good

Yep, I'm still liking this one. Really look forward to future chapters. I'm happy with both premises. I always like it when characters have nex experiences, but I also like hearing the background of how things got started. I'm pretty sure from hints that Mike used to fuck his sister. How did that start? And does Denise have a secret with her mom of her own that Mike doesn't know? Denise was always thought to be a lesbain, any other girls we don't know about? These are all potential past events that could be explored, as well as new ones. It's not just the destination or the journey, it's both, and I look forward to future chapters.

You could use an editor

There is at least one place in this story where you wrote "so" instead of what context suggests should be "no" -- something that an editor would have caught.

But, as before, good story. I'm looking forward to the next chapter(s).

Inccredibly hot

Love your prose. Feels like the characters are standing in front of me.

Awesome!

Simply fucking AWESOME!

Pretty good

Some of the dialogue is a little childish and this nonsense should not be written: "I felt warm fluid soak my pants over my thigh as a dim hiss of released fluid reached my ears."
Apart from that, very good.

"Holy fuck."

... is three syllables, not two... ;-)

Very nice, except for the hint of Mike liking too much the feeling of dominating Denise. Maybe some guys are into that; I'm not, beyond a certain point anyway. It cut my rating.

Mike/denise

Mike's domination of Denise considering she is of legal age would still be considered abuse where I come from and that lowered the score. Plus the dialogue needed a good proofreader.

fantasy

I'm a little surprised someone lowered their score of the story because they considered the relationship abusive. Learn the difference between fantasy and reality. Nobody was abused. Nobody was hurt. Plus, this is an incest category to begin with. If you don't have a problem with a fantasy about incest then I'm surprised you have a problem with consensual domination. But diff'rent strokes I guess.
About the story, it's pretty hot. Could use a little polishing up, but still it's pretty complete. Also, yeah, I noted it's three syllables too. ;-)

gave it a 5 for your effort and because

the asshole annony. didn't like it!!

A little too much

I think it is good of Mike to show Denise that she is beautiful. Desirable, sexy, everything a young girl should know about herself as a matter of course. I think, from what I'm reading, that Niecey is pretty inexperienced about sex. Not a virgin, just a bit naive'. It seems to me that Uncle Mike is teaching her the Dom/sub side of sex too soon. And being her uncle he needs to be careful what he teaches her to be. She is vulnerable and has a lack of confidence and (thanks to kinfolk) body issues. Her dress, her style, her actions all say she is herself and wants to go her own way, but her uncle is teaching her to be dependant, submissive, seek his approval, obey his commands. I know its early in the story to draw conclusions, but once that is started it is a difficult thing to untrain.