My critique, assuming you've allowed "COMMENTS", is that it was awfully short, and not a particularly interesting read.
The story was short, but sometimes they are.and thats okay. You included everything that needed to be said without be dragged out.Good job.
One of my favorite fantasies... having a stranger eat my pussy in a dressing room while other shoppers are just outside the door. Loved the story, just wish it had a little more juice to it. Great job.
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If you're not proud enough of your story to allow "VOTING", why do you post it?
My critique, assuming you've allowed "COMMENTS", is that it was awfully short, and not a particularly interesting read.
Fredricks
The story was short, but sometimes they are.and thats okay. You included everything that needed to be said without be dragged out.Good job.
Almost
One of my favorite fantasies... having a stranger eat my pussy in a dressing room while other shoppers are just outside the door. Loved the story, just wish it had a little more juice to it. Great job.
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