Cucked by My Daughter

Ever heard of using quotations for dialog?

One star.

This isn't in the right title

Who is this even incest/taboo? 1 Star its too bad that there isn't any way to give you a 1/2 star since that's what this story really is.

waste of time

Please don't write anymore until you have at least read a book

not bad

kinda aroused me....??

Terrible

Give it up now.

when she was 5 he contributed to her bike

now she is the village bike.
she learned well from her mother.
he learned nothing.

so close!

in my opinion the story had a lot of potential! if i could add 2 points of criticism however it would be...1) slow down! why did you rush through it? build a little character developement and create somewhat of a timeline. 2) find an editor!!! the hardest part about the story was figuring out what you were trying to say and that just killed it. check the forums...ppl always willing to help out.

SH.T

That is a really horrible sick story. Please don't contribute anything else

not terrible

just slow down a little. Embrace it. Take the same amount of detail you used to describe her tits and describe the other guys emotions, her emotions.

STORY

Writing a complete sentence is very important. Spelling errors can cause the reader to miss the actual meaning in the story. This story was so confusing with all the errors in it. Elementry Watson", said Sherlock. What a waste of reading time.

Actually, it is

terrible.
Spelling, word selection, grammar, punctuation, believability.
Belief in the story is hard enough in this category without having a forced tale like this. I can think of no reason for the daughter to want to humiliate dad. And for her to enter his life, just that quick, and jump right to it, makes no sense.
Read other stories, learn from them. Proper sentence structure, quotation marks. Ask yourself as you write if the progression seems plausible.