I would have preferred longer chapters for this story, but I still liked it. I was shocked at the turn of events when their folks learned about the relationship between the siblings. Not their reaction, but the lack of Alice trying to defend him or intervene in what her father did to Mike. Then she let them take her away and make it so he could never see her and she just let it happen. She said she loved him and could not live without him yet she let him almost die and then vanished from his life. Then she has the nerve to ask him to be at her wedding? God what a bitch. ( Yeah I know it is just a story ) She got what she deserved in the end at least.
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Anonymous02/05/15
To be honest I was hoping for some kind of reconciliation with him and his sister but considering everything she put him through I don't blame him one bit. The sister in one was a bitch and I don't use the word to describe women that often. The one time he needs her to stand up for him and she let's her dad beat the hell out of him and then moves on her life like nothing ever happened. It was a bit anticlimactic in my opinion... would have loved to have read about the sister's husband and his conversation and a bit more.
I was glad to finally see this story resolved. Stories like this cry for an ending, and I had gotten to the point where I couldn't even read the first chapter again without grinding my teeth. It may not be the 'and they all lived happily ever after' ending some people like, but justice was served, and the main character is happy. Thanks - five stars.
Given what his sister did to him I like the ending. BUT.... I just don't understand why she did it! She NEVER explained to Mike why she didn't side with him! Alice was never portrayed as a slut before Becca was introduced. We never found out why Becca, Alice's best friend, thought she was a skank!
I feel like you felt obligated to finish the story and just threw the ending together!
And while the story has a great story line there are just too many holes that have gone unexplaine and make us feel kinda scratching our heads wondering! However
I do respect that you felt your readers deserved and ending to this story! Nothing worse than a story with no ending!
she fucks him,betrays him,tries to reconcile with him by inviting him to the wedding,then when he is attacked from behind she blames him again for messing up her life?what a waste of an ending that you just rushed thru and should have left undone.
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Anonymous02/12/15
WASTE OF TIME
if you are smart, and this story proves you aren't, you will delete all chapters of this crappy story and stop writing. this is one of the worst stories on this site you should have put it in the NONEROTIC area as the whole thing was a total turn off from start to so called end.
I am happy you finished your story I kinda wished you didn't change the sister into a bitch who betrayed him but the direction you went with it is still good I hope you think about writing more stories
English
Living well
is the best revenge?
Not the usual story
I would have preferred longer chapters for this story, but I still liked it. I was shocked at the turn of events when their folks learned about the relationship between the siblings. Not their reaction, but the lack of Alice trying to defend him or intervene in what her father did to Mike. Then she let them take her away and make it so he could never see her and she just let it happen. She said she loved him and could not live without him yet she let him almost die and then vanished from his life. Then she has the nerve to ask him to be at her wedding? God what a bitch. ( Yeah I know it is just a story ) She got what she deserved in the end at least.
To be honest I was hoping for some kind of reconciliation with him and his sister but considering everything she put him through I don't blame him one bit. The sister in one was a bitch and I don't use the word to describe women that often. The one time he needs her to stand up for him and she let's her dad beat the hell out of him and then moves on her life like nothing ever happened. It was a bit anticlimactic in my opinion... would have loved to have read about the sister's husband and his conversation and a bit more.
Resolution
I was glad to finally see this story resolved. Stories like this cry for an ending, and I had gotten to the point where I couldn't even read the first chapter again without grinding my teeth. It may not be the 'and they all lived happily ever after' ending some people like, but justice was served, and the main character is happy. Thanks - five stars.
Well
Given what his sister did to him I like the ending. BUT.... I just don't understand why she did it! She NEVER explained to Mike why she didn't side with him! Alice was never portrayed as a slut before Becca was introduced. We never found out why Becca, Alice's best friend, thought she was a skank!
I feel like you felt obligated to finish the story and just threw the ending together!
And while the story has a great story line there are just too many holes that have gone unexplaine and make us feel kinda scratching our heads wondering! However
I do respect that you felt your readers deserved and ending to this story! Nothing worse than a story with no ending!
she fucks him,betrays him,tries to reconcile with him by inviting him to the wedding,then when he is attacked from behind she blames him again for messing up her life?what a waste of an ending that you just rushed thru and should have left undone.
WASTE OF TIME
if you are smart, and this story proves you aren't, you will delete all chapters of this crappy story and stop writing. this is one of the worst stories on this site you should have put it in the NONEROTIC area as the whole thing was a total turn off from start to so called end.
good work
I am happy you finished your story I kinda wished you didn't change the sister into a bitch who betrayed him but the direction you went with it is still good I hope you think about writing more stories
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