Flower Girl Ch. 03

A gift

This is a fabulously written story. The character development is nuanced and feels honest, believable, and not forced. You have a gift for writing dialogue. Thank you for completing the story so you can post daily, I look forward to my "me time" when I can read them.

delightful chapter

DN, i enjoy the methodical progress of this storyline. Realistic fiction with believable characters.

It always surprises me, the usually inane, sometimes ridiculous conversations, inflicted upon a reluctant public audience by the socially oblivious babbling away on their cellphones.

Wonderful!

The development of the characters and relationships is so natural, so languid and yet the tension builds and builds.

The romantic touches (the floral arrangement, the first kiss, etc) are just perfect and achingly romantic--my wife just melted again and again as I read this to her.

Perfection.

Better than

Even better than Subway Girl which I loved and could not wait to read the next chapter. So it is again even more so!

I told you

I was hooked. You appear to be as much a rookie at writing as Tracy is with arranging flowers.

So comfortable

I finally have to comment on the comfort of being in the company of Tracy and William and the joy of feeling them approach each other. I have no wish to pick apart the technique of the writing because the story is so much fun. Love it, keep it coming.

Enthralled

I truly enjoy your writing, especially the personalities of your characters! Thank you so much for sharing your writing with us!

Better than Subway Girl that I gave all fives

This is so much better the pacing is superb,can't wait until tomorrows chapter. Best on this site!

A breath of fresh air.

I am at a loss for words. Thank you for sharing this part of you with me. I am besides myself waiting for your next posting.

So very cunning!

Melissa's obsession adds the perfect tension to their otherwise flawless experience, and then on top of that, her childish pettiness provides the perfect contrast to their rich and complex emotions, and to William's supreme patience. And then on top of that, the atmosphere of the museum and the potent sense of a real journey as they move through it ... intricate and ingenious!

Impressive Work

I see that you have learned an important lesson from Subway Girl and instead of leaving people complaining that they can't wait until the following Saturday for another dose of your writing you are doing it on sequential days. That explains how you improved on excellent because you could examine the whole story before posting.
It is a fascinating exercise in detailing.

Roles reversed.

I thought briefly Tracy and Williams roles were reversed at the very beggining of this chapter. I see some of my lesser qualitys here especially at the Met, my inpatients, attention, distractions, Tracy reading all the info, like my wife, while I like to shuffle along. I love the art, I just won't remember.
Wonderful story by the way, its telling me something about myself, and I should aspire to be more. William is wrong about a storie with in a story, I'm not skimming over, both are good.
Do you think Literotica is a place to work on stories, I think there is enough structure on this site, its a bit like Williams library. There are lots of great comments, a rating system, a favorites authors to help me find my way back to a author I enjoy. oops lost my way, getting chatty.
Thanks, I won't get much done till I finish your story...

Flower is the story

Heaving read three chapters this evening, was like a flower bud opening while sex is not forgotten. Its where it belongs in a growing blossoming love story. I wish I was able to express myself like you can. Janice

Amazing!

Wow! This is a terrific example of why most of the really good writing is in romance. Sexuality and good writing. Looking forward to more.

kreative

it feels like we are browsing your
kabinet of kuriosities by reading this wonderful series.

I love it! I love it!!!!!!
So refreshing reading this!