Please do not put this on the back burner...I really like this story. This is my first time reading any of your stories and am feeling this. Good job.
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Anonymous02/06/15
loooove it!!
A great start! Really interested on how the story continues. My personal pet peeve when it comes to stories involving reluctant females (in the beginning) is when they acquiesce far too easily. Ariana shows considerable fire I would love to see an actual fight for her freedom, makes the character's eventual surrender far more satisfying ;) Please don't leave us waiting too long for the next chapter!!
I am intrigued. Good start. Looking forward to reading more.
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Anonymous02/16/15
Most sensous
You have the talents & skills. Good work. Just keep it up and move ahead. You will go places.
Keep up the good work and good luck. Your fans need more of your erotic mind.
Sam
kinkykingfisher@yahoo.com
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Anonymous02/26/15
Hi PoeticallyPersonified!
I've been hoping that you would write another story like "Something Unexpected" ! I'm Gay, and I like reading lesbian sex stories.
كنت "السماء في الصحراء" قصة جديدة !؟! إذا كنت تعرف أي شيء عن ثقافة الشعب في هذا الجزء من العالم، و كنت أعرف كيف خاطئة أنت!
I'm from Cairo, Egypt and this is Arabic, if your interested in translating what I wrote, google it.
Interesting idea. You did make it plain how they knew her so well, although it's still a tad hazy to me exactly why--it seems they would have waited until she finished college at least. I will keep reading, as your character and setting sounds intriguing.
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Anonymous03/13/16
missing the verisimilitude
It's an interesting plot line, but very hard to swallow (pun not intended), I mean, Ariana doesn't seem bothered with the fact she has been kidnapped and brought to another country. It's all a little... very unrealistic. And it's also full of clichés: so the guy likes strong, sophisticated, educated women, but then wants one who's perfectly submissive (she has to learn how to cook etc.)?
English
Love it
Cont plz
So far so good.
Great storyline
Please continue.
go for it...
good start...like it...more!
Great beginning
Please do not put this on the back burner...I really like this story. This is my first time reading any of your stories and am feeling this. Good job.
loooove it!!
A great start! Really interested on how the story continues. My personal pet peeve when it comes to stories involving reluctant females (in the beginning) is when they acquiesce far too easily. Ariana shows considerable fire I would love to see an actual fight for her freedom, makes the character's eventual surrender far more satisfying ;) Please don't leave us waiting too long for the next chapter!!
5*****
I am intrigued. Good start. Looking forward to reading more.
Most sensous
You have the talents & skills. Good work. Just keep it up and move ahead. You will go places.
Keep up the good work and good luck. Your fans need more of your erotic mind.
Sam
kinkykingfisher@yahoo.com
Hi PoeticallyPersonified!
I've been hoping that you would write another story like "Something Unexpected" ! I'm Gay, and I like reading lesbian sex stories.
كنت "السماء في الصحراء" قصة جديدة !؟! إذا كنت تعرف أي شيء عن ثقافة الشعب في هذا الجزء من العالم، و كنت أعرف كيف خاطئة أنت!
I'm from Cairo, Egypt and this is Arabic, if your interested in translating what I wrote, google it.
Lesbian, Sundari.
4 stars
Interesting idea. You did make it plain how they knew her so well, although it's still a tad hazy to me exactly why--it seems they would have waited until she finished college at least. I will keep reading, as your character and setting sounds intriguing.
missing the verisimilitude
It's an interesting plot line, but very hard to swallow (pun not intended), I mean, Ariana doesn't seem bothered with the fact she has been kidnapped and brought to another country. It's all a little... very unrealistic. And it's also full of clichés: so the guy likes strong, sophisticated, educated women, but then wants one who's perfectly submissive (she has to learn how to cook etc.)?
I will continue reading :)
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