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by Anonymous02/17/15

Editing needed

I really like this, but you keep switching from first person to third person, sometimes in the same paragraph - she, me, I...their, our. You really need to fix this, because your story is good!

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by TheBlackMoth02/22/15

Thank you

You are right about the switching in POV. Fixed this error and am awating the update to be posted by admin. Thanks for reading!

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