I really like this, but you keep switching from first person to third person, sometimes in the same paragraph - she, me, I...their, our. You really need to fix this, because your story is good!
You are right about the switching in POV. Fixed this error and am awating the update to be posted by admin. Thanks for reading!
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I really like this, but you keep switching from first person to third person, sometimes in the same paragraph - she, me, I...their, our. You really need to fix this, because your story is good!
Thank you
You are right about the switching in POV. Fixed this error and am awating the update to be posted by admin. Thanks for reading!
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