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Running into Bed

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous02/04/15

please get an editor.

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by Anonymous02/07/15

good

That was a very interesting story to read.

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by kmillerk102/08/15

Please fill in the blanks

Don't put xxxxx,, this is fiction, make something up. PLEASE

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by Anonymous02/09/15

Huh?

Firstly, why are you putting xxxxxx in for the places, names etc. it's a story so have you not got any imagination that you can't make up any place names? Doesn't make any sense. When do you ever read a story that has anything like this?
You really need an editor and someone to go over your grammar and writing issues

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