Darla

What??

The. Fuck??!

MINUTES for fuck's sake.

Nice Start

Can't wait to see where you take Darla. and does Daddy become Dadddyyyyyyy.
Eventually the Ex will come to stick her nose in. So keep Writing and forget the Anons. they cant be up front so relegate them to the Back.

Good Story

Waiting for next chapter. Thanks

strange at first..

and then he has complete control over her. Great start of a great series.

Good start.

I thought it was a good start and I look forward to the next chapters.
Ignore the dispariging remarks because people who pass those comments are frightened to put there names to them. Further more, if they can do any better let them try.

Very Nice

I like this beginning. Looking forward to new chapters

WTF?

and again; WTF?

And it'll be even better when you ...

... learn to proof read and eliminate all the e=senseless errors!
"The tour ended where both of us knew it wold."? 'would'!
"... and I posses the only key. "? 'possess'!
Even using Spell Check would have caught those two!

Two things

First, please indicate either in the title or at the story's beginning that this is to be continued. Second, please find an editor. The numerous errors really detracted from what otherwise could develop into an interesting tale.

A good beginning

I found this story pretty good and can't wait to see how it continues.