Day 01: Mike

I liked the scene of the mom topless by the pool. The pictures of his parents fucking and sucking was hot, too. However, when she said no but he forced her by blackmailing her, that sucked. And not in a good way either.

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A little consistency with characters please.

In one hour he went from shy loner to
dominant narcissistic greedy asshole.

And his mother will never, ever trust this little
shit again as long as she lives.

more please

Great start I really hope more adventures are on the way?

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Mom want's to be dominated! The least she could do after that blowjob is get her lazy ass into the kitchen and make sonny-boy a sandwich!

Son is an asshole

When I read this - "I grabbed hold of her head and forced myself deeper into her, face fucking her with abandon." - that's a major turnoff for me. A son should never force his mother to do anything. ***

Son is a pussy & for that you get 1*. She should whooped his little bitch ass.

5 stars

Ignore them it's a great story so far. Now make his mom his personal slut.

Another inexperienced kid :)) - Ofourse kid with "shaved" brain..

- Hormones.. Young age and imagination - they give just such "shaved" effects!

Another wishful fantasy

What kid would talk to his mother like that? GET A LIFE!!! Try to be realistic with your writing and ignore the idiots that think this is good. Their obviously as screwed up as you.

this writer must be a total loser. His writing reflects the kid of person he is, immature and he portrayed his character to be some desperate loser that doesn't love his mother and is so hard up that he'd rape her. I feel bad because this writer will never get pussy, even prostitutes will turn him down.

More on the way for sure.

@boaman007 I'm glad you enjoyed this one. I'm a new (adult literature) writer, so I'm not too worried about the criticism. The whole piece (7 chapters planned so far) will be the real judge of the storyline. Stay tuned for more.