Love Unexpected Ch. 01

Way too short!

Seriously, we all know you've written the rest in your head. Now just put it on paper, or online, as it were.

That's it?

That barely qualifies as a submission. That's closer to an excerpt.

36D and 9 inches? Cut the b/s! 32 or 34 B or C and 6 to 7 inches would be more like it. Why do so many writers make their character into freaks.

too short

don't forget were leaving in an hour bro.
That night I laid in bed wondering what the rest of the summer would hold.
thought they had left !!!!

not bs

For those of you who are calling bs on size...I'm a NATURAL 36D...it happens...my sister is a 34DD...crap happens.

Stupid

I quit reading when you mentioned the drive from South Georgia, wherever that is, to Tulum Mexico wouldn't be too bad. Idiotic!

Keep going...

Everyone's writing style is different, their own, and/or not perfect. Keep going with it. It's getting interesting.

I like it

It's a good start and as for people saying that 36 D beasts are fake or unrealistic then they can go to hell I my self am a 38DD naturally keep going

Not a bad drive?

Albany, Ga to Tulum, Mexico: 2467 miles. Not a day trip...and pretty bad driving on some of those roads.
Try to be more realistic.
Oh, and for you skeptics ... my 60 YO spouse still has her (not quite as perky) 34Ds.

Good start

This was a good start but you had one mistake at the end. I loved the trip idea. In 2005 I rode my motorcycle to Canada which took me across the Rockies twice for a total of 8700 miles.

chapter 2

I can't wait for another chapter!

chp. 2

I can't wait for a second chapter.

plz update

Liked it...
But only one chapter pg...Too short