story isn't adding up. man all upset he got dumped. supposedly ex gave him permission to make a clone? do not buy that. man is learning nothing but to be a jackass and act like an orge. female is left to just be a total zombie like slave. this could of been a good story but there is no emotional component. man isn't learning to love. female isn't either. the sex isn't even entertaining just paint by numbers, there for porn aspect only.
English
I read both parts
And it still makes no sense and wasn't any fun to read.The characters seem to have the IQ of pea. Couldn't write worse dialogue if you tried. UGH!
Not good
End this
forgot emotional componet
story isn't adding up. man all upset he got dumped. supposedly ex gave him permission to make a clone? do not buy that. man is learning nothing but to be a jackass and act like an orge. female is left to just be a total zombie like slave. this could of been a good story but there is no emotional component. man isn't learning to love. female isn't either. the sex isn't even entertaining just paint by numbers, there for porn aspect only.
I have to agree. end this. start over.
AMAZING
I LOVE IT KEEP IT UP
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