What a great story, always makes you want to come back for more.
If you haven't read this story from the beginning, I recommend you do. It is a wonderful
story that keeps you coming back for more.
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Anonymous02/06/15
further twists and turns
I really admire the storycraft here. You've cleverly deflected from the much-anticipated photo shoot Main Event (I know most of your readers thought Liz would be a no-show, or else Gwen would get lassoed in somehow), while introducing further possibilities and complications. The little snippets we did see were certainly hot-- It makes for an excellent tease, and as always I look forward to the next installment!
I really thought the photo-shoot would be a watershed moment in the storyline. I was looking forward to it immensely, yet nervous that it wouldn't fit with the style of the story so far.
I had two concerns in my head - one that it would be really raunchy, very enjoyable and move the action into a different gear, but maybe at the same time not sit too easily with the characters and situation established so far, possibly to the ultimate detriment of the story as a whole.
The other that the story would stick too closely to the established characters and behaviours but essentially nothing new would happen, and the series would continue to be an exquisitely written slice of life, but suffer from the sense that its not really going anywhere new any more.
You've basically written idea two, but at the same time introduced some new leads that - I hope - will lead to new & exciting situations in future. Gwen clearly was not thinking about what may happen when Kristin shows up to one of her rides with Nat when she issued her invite, so there's another pivotal moment coming up.
One outcome could be a return to more modest behaviour - but again, if that happens where is the story ultimately going? If they continue riding topless, then there is a whole new dynamic going on.
Then there's also the hints that Nat is a sub... not something I would have guessed so far. How's that going to pan out I wonder?
I'm intrigued!
Five stars. Hope I don't have to wait as long for the next instalment though. On the other hand - take as long as you like if it keeps the quality this high.
Love the way you write
The story seems short because I am so interested
but the ideas always tittilate
Thanks
Take as much time as you need
You are worth waiting on...
Gwen and family are represented as Georgians. True natives of Georgia (and the South) refer to all sodas, pops, soft drinks as a "Coke." It a cultural thing.
English
What a great story, always makes you want to come back for more.
If you haven't read this story from the beginning, I recommend you do. It is a wonderful
story that keeps you coming back for more.
further twists and turns
I really admire the storycraft here. You've cleverly deflected from the much-anticipated photo shoot Main Event (I know most of your readers thought Liz would be a no-show, or else Gwen would get lassoed in somehow), while introducing further possibilities and complications. The little snippets we did see were certainly hot-- It makes for an excellent tease, and as always I look forward to the next installment!
Unexpected, but brilliant
I really thought the photo-shoot would be a watershed moment in the storyline. I was looking forward to it immensely, yet nervous that it wouldn't fit with the style of the story so far.
I had two concerns in my head - one that it would be really raunchy, very enjoyable and move the action into a different gear, but maybe at the same time not sit too easily with the characters and situation established so far, possibly to the ultimate detriment of the story as a whole.
The other that the story would stick too closely to the established characters and behaviours but essentially nothing new would happen, and the series would continue to be an exquisitely written slice of life, but suffer from the sense that its not really going anywhere new any more.
You've basically written idea two, but at the same time introduced some new leads that - I hope - will lead to new & exciting situations in future. Gwen clearly was not thinking about what may happen when Kristin shows up to one of her rides with Nat when she issued her invite, so there's another pivotal moment coming up.
One outcome could be a return to more modest behaviour - but again, if that happens where is the story ultimately going? If they continue riding topless, then there is a whole new dynamic going on.
Then there's also the hints that Nat is a sub... not something I would have guessed so far. How's that going to pan out I wonder?
I'm intrigued!
Five stars. Hope I don't have to wait as long for the next instalment though. On the other hand - take as long as you like if it keeps the quality this high.
Excellent as usual
Love the way you write
The story seems short because I am so interested
but the ideas always tittilate
Thanks
Take as much time as you need
You are worth waiting on...
An Editorial Comment
Gwen says, "I, uhh, maybe a soda or something..."
Gwen and family are represented as Georgians. True natives of Georgia (and the South) refer to all sodas, pops, soft drinks as a "Coke." It a cultural thing.
"Thank you, very much," as Brenda Lee would say.
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