Three Demons Ch. 03

Great Job

This makes me very curious as to what to expect next,you have a great eye for character development,keep it up!!!

Love this story

Your attention to detail is fantastic..... I wish that there were two pages it seemed so short.... left me wanting so much more. Here is to hoping they miss her and come get her. the home life is terrible to say the least..... She will make changes for herself. Keep it up patiently waiting for next installment.....

I got a feeling the guys are going to keep a closer eye on her now that they see how she has been living.

I really like this

I just wish there was more.
Fantastic chapter.

Nice job

I enjoyed the chapter, but it was very short. Would love to read more.

Very good! Nice and enjoyable movement of the story. The description of the bathroom slows the pace of the story considerably, a little much in my personal opinion. I like the bits describing the lack of personalization to the bathroom, that gives a very good picture of these people, these shape shifting demons or whatever they are, in a way that solidifies that fact to the audience in a fresh and new way without having us wonder why she didn't connect the dots sooner; however, the parts like describing the tile on the wall do not feel as necessary, and given it's what we start with, the slow pace is very noticeable.

I'm sorry if this sounds harsh, it's intended to be constructive critique. If you're writing this as self indulgence or other such reasons where you do not particularly want such a thing, do disregard the above as irrelevant heh. But yes, lovely, and I'd say "I can't wait for more!" but that sounds like entirely too much pressure to put on you, who writes for what i assume is your own enjoyment, and graciously allows the rest of us to read what you write for free. so I'll just say this: I'm excited for more , but don't push yourself and remember that hobbies are supposed to be fun/ take a break I'd it quits being enjoyable. :B;

more please and soon

I am really enjoying the slow build up but I am dying for longer chapters

So short

but I'm hooked. Really like Freya's resilience. She's strong and holds her vulnerable parts close but they're there. Seems like those are just the guys to build her self-confidence. Looking forward to more.

slow build up

Great story though. Please continue and maybe make them longer.

Great

What a fabulous story. I love the fact you are not rushing the plot.
Please continue. There is so much potential customers not this well written tale.

Good story. Keep going.

You want to like Freya and help her even before you learn about her home situation. The writing about the male characters is very descriptive. Drawn in.

MORE

You've got to add more!! We needs it precious, yes yes

more and longer please!

All we want is something longer to entertain ourselves please... It is ok if you take a while, but the wait is killing us... Give us something longer to hold the wait!

Im dying!

I need more! I'm so hooked!

moreeee!

you need to make them longer and gosh I want them to come rescue her already!

Keep Going

I can see I'm getting close to the end of what's published and I don't want it to stop!