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by fanfare02/09/15

good chapter

ba, this is a well-written interim chapter. You covered some of the important points for Melissa's recent back-story.

The only suggestion that comes to my mind would be dependent on how involved you want to write Melissa's character?

If you intend for a few layers of complexity, you might consider revealing her relationship with her family and old friends. At least include some info about her present friends and colleagues.

If Professor Gavin is not her Faculty Advisor/mentor, whoever? I think you need to include some details. Especially for a profession such as Archeology, who knows you will be determined by patronage of a senior scientist or educator.

P.S. Any chance of hijinks on a dig?

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by Piscator03/03/15

Good story but probably should be under another category - category can change over the progression of your story

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