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Wow!
That was truly, truly horrible!! A genuine one star effort! Naturally, I loved it. I need to see more of this type of writing. I mean, there was nothing, nothing at all worth saving. Even the title! How do you do it?!?!
Wow, what a piece of shit!
At no point did it even do a flyby on erotic, all it tells me is you're 12-13 and a zit-magnet hiding in mommy's basement and masturbating constantly. Wash your hands and read something by the grown-up's on this site, if you're going to insist on posting here; at least try learn how to make a passably decent effort.
Seriously?
This was by far one of the top ten worst I have read on here in a very long time. Soon as I read the 40DD I knew the 9 or 10" cock would show up...sure enough.
GET A LIFE!!! How old are you 14? Seriously, like the others said..what a pile of crap! Please stop 'writing' and I use that word generously...This was a one star, and a zero star if they allowed it.
Wish my aunt was like that. I want to fuck someone now. I have read and watched to much fucking porn today. I need something to put my dick in though.
Sorry, wish I could of been there! It could of been the best fucking threesome in the whole fucking universe.
it wis ok
i fuck my aunt win i wise 16 she wise 30 never forget. big cock cord
First time?
I can tell this is your first effort. I'm not going to be like the others.
It was too short. I can understand the hot lust thing but you need to plot the story and think about your characters. Slow the action down. Building up to the sex. It seems they lusted for each other but you never said why. The nephew obviously had lust in his heart for her but how did it happen? Why did her husband leave? How did he get custody of his child?
If you decide on a part two and I hope you do, please take your time and further the plot. Fill in the blanks then write your story. Also find editors that can help you.
I've seen worse.
All of these excessively rude comments are pathetic. Why are you dicks acting like you're the Ernest Hemingway of erotic stories? Maybe the guy is a new writer, why don't you try being constructive with your lonely nerd anger?
re: I've seen worse.
Wow, those comments must have hit close to home for you to spew that much venom. Oddly, THEY comment on the story while YOU commented on them. Yeah, they're the ones being rude and full of lonely nerd anger.
Ya want constructive comments? Start with yourself.
I had to stop reading
I stopped reading as soon as he got to the aunts house. This story was terrible. There was no build up. Do you understand what 40DD means? 40 is how many inches around and DD is the cup size. She's obese if it's 40. Why was the aunt so deranged? What mental illness did she suffer from? I could tell the nephew was just some hard up loser who never get's laid, but the woman's husband left her and he took the kid. Why? Maybe in the future you could create a plot that explains that because his mother travels for work and is absent for long periods of time, that the boy is detached and doesn't have any mother-son love relationship, if you did this ( and i am being kind. I don't think you have the talent to write without literally stating it.) this could be why he and his aunt have this close relationship and then if you knew how to write, you'd build up and eventually it could lead to a erotic sex story, but I think all you're capable of is writing filth stories with no plot. Read a book and learn how to write.
1
Is just giving it a 1 enough?
Beginner?
So, what's the most important thing about erotic fiction?
The fucking?
Nope.
The plain explicit language?
Nope.
It's the build up.
I know, it's good to write about fucking, and when the two people are full-on about it, wow.
But it's still the build up.
Show me 20 pages of buildup and half a paragraph of fucking, and that could be erotic.
But this had virtually no build-up.
Still, you have time to develop your style... so make the most of it.
Why?
I'm a fan of this type of story, but I have a question. Why do the vast majority of these stories have the Mother, Aunt, Sister or whoever have giant, enormous, 40DD. DDD or larger breasts? As long as they have good shapes even A's, B,s are good!
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