I like this story. Here's my sugestion though. You asked for them, so I will give it, but if it doesn't fit your idea of the story, that's OK. I just thought I'd throw it out. You need to introduce another girl into the sexual equation. Whether it's Mom visiting and caught up in the whirlwind, someone they meet that rocks both their worlds, or Isabella willing to give it another go after discovering the truth and finding it excites her. But another girl. Just my opinion. Love the story regardless.
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Anonymous02/12/15
Love the story. Under no circumstances should you bring others into their relationship.
Have them love each other, get married and potentially have a baby. Just your basic happily ever after exclusively together. Thanks for this story
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Anonymous02/12/15
Like it
You've got me hooked. Good storyline with potential.
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Anonymous02/13/15
Nice story, I really like it. Need a way for them to figure out marriage in the next chapter though, keeping Isabelle (and anyone else) out of it, better as a love story then a fuck-fest.
You asked for comments. I hope there will be a part 3. If the company would let them then lets see them marry. You set it up with the different names and dual citizenship, etc. I love this story though so keep up the good work! IMHO
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Anonymous02/16/15
Can't wait for next Chapter
Keep going with the story, love it and where it is going. But I agree, Please don't bring others into the story keep it between them.
they are happy, they are together, it could be forever if they don't mess it up, and their little secret makes it more exciting for them. the only part left is the ever aftering.
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Anonymous03/06/15
You got promoted!
You are my new favorite autor.. You do have some unique writing skills, well played!
I think this chapter might be a good ending too but if you want to continue it I am quite curious about the turns you're bringing.
Would be nice to read it as a love-story :)
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Anonymous03/08/15
Well done so far.
However if the story continues I don't think we have heard the last of Isabelle. Could be a problem if the parents come to visit!
I really like the way you have used more expressive words to describe their feeling and the way they do things.
Thanks
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Anonymous03/10/15
Slight Caveat
Unless she applied for, and was recognized as a British Citizen with dual nationality, and resided here for more than 4 years, she's not a British citizen, ergo not an EU citizen, and therefore not entitled to work in anywhere in the EU; under existing EU regulations, and UK Immigration and Nationality Law, dual nationality must be applied for and recognized, especially if the parents are only based in the country on a temporary overseas posting from their normal country of residence, otherwise the nationality of both parents, or the father if a single-parent family, is taken to be the nationality of the child when considering permissions to work and reside in the EU. Unless a child is born to non-EU immigrants legally permitted to reside in Britain, being born here doesn't automatically confer citizenship, as is the case with America, and never did,
Thanks for clarifying that. The story is, of course, just a fantasy, and not meant as a tutorial for bypassing Italian laws, or EU laws. My admittedly brief search of the Internet was merely to get a general idea of how a non Italian gets to work there.
I meant to click on 5 stars, but I was hovering over the stars while I was yakking with someone and I twitched and accidentally popped 1 star instead; I'm such a klutz sometimes, my wife says I should only be allowed out with a keeper and someone to apologise for all the damage. This is a great story, you're obviously having fun with it, and you have a talent for the succinct, witty turn of phrase, and this is definitely a 5-star story so far. I wanted to give you 5 stars, I wish I still could, if only this site would let us backtrack I'd do it in a flash. Sorry, mea culpa.
It's funny how you read a story and one little insignificant detail can niggle at your brain.
They go out to an opera house that you said was built in 1880. They have a 4-seat private box all to themselves, and the thing that I couldn't get past was Ro flipping up the armrest between them. I just can't imagine that a hall built 1880 would have modern day stadium-style seating in private boxes. I would think that such an old building would have individual (and probably antique) chairs in the private boxes. I guess my frame of reference is President Lincoln's box at Ford's Theater, which is also from that era.
In the grand scheme of this wonderful story, it's a trivial detail, and yet -- in this chapter -- my mind chose to fixate upon that as being out of place.
English
Nice story
I like this story. Here's my sugestion though. You asked for them, so I will give it, but if it doesn't fit your idea of the story, that's OK. I just thought I'd throw it out. You need to introduce another girl into the sexual equation. Whether it's Mom visiting and caught up in the whirlwind, someone they meet that rocks both their worlds, or Isabella willing to give it another go after discovering the truth and finding it excites her. But another girl. Just my opinion. Love the story regardless.
Love the story. Under no circumstances should you bring others into their relationship.
Have them love each other, get married and potentially have a baby. Just your basic happily ever after exclusively together. Thanks for this story
Like it
You've got me hooked. Good storyline with potential.
Nice story, I really like it. Need a way for them to figure out marriage in the next chapter though, keeping Isabelle (and anyone else) out of it, better as a love story then a fuck-fest.
Great Story!
You asked for comments. I hope there will be a part 3. If the company would let them then lets see them marry. You set it up with the different names and dual citizenship, etc. I love this story though so keep up the good work! IMHO
Can't wait for next Chapter
Keep going with the story, love it and where it is going. But I agree, Please don't bring others into the story keep it between them.
I think it has gone far enough
they are happy, they are together, it could be forever if they don't mess it up, and their little secret makes it more exciting for them. the only part left is the ever aftering.
You got promoted!
You are my new favorite autor.. You do have some unique writing skills, well played!
I think this chapter might be a good ending too but if you want to continue it I am quite curious about the turns you're bringing.
Would be nice to read it as a love-story :)
Well done so far.
However if the story continues I don't think we have heard the last of Isabelle. Could be a problem if the parents come to visit!
I really like the way you have used more expressive words to describe their feeling and the way they do things.
Thanks
Slight Caveat
Unless she applied for, and was recognized as a British Citizen with dual nationality, and resided here for more than 4 years, she's not a British citizen, ergo not an EU citizen, and therefore not entitled to work in anywhere in the EU; under existing EU regulations, and UK Immigration and Nationality Law, dual nationality must be applied for and recognized, especially if the parents are only based in the country on a temporary overseas posting from their normal country of residence, otherwise the nationality of both parents, or the father if a single-parent family, is taken to be the nationality of the child when considering permissions to work and reside in the EU. Unless a child is born to non-EU immigrants legally permitted to reside in Britain, being born here doesn't automatically confer citizenship, as is the case with America, and never did,
Author here.
Thanks for clarifying that. The story is, of course, just a fantasy, and not meant as a tutorial for bypassing Italian laws, or EU laws. My admittedly brief search of the Internet was merely to get a general idea of how a non Italian gets to work there.
Anyway :-)
My apologies
I meant to click on 5 stars, but I was hovering over the stars while I was yakking with someone and I twitched and accidentally popped 1 star instead; I'm such a klutz sometimes, my wife says I should only be allowed out with a keeper and someone to apologise for all the damage. This is a great story, you're obviously having fun with it, and you have a talent for the succinct, witty turn of phrase, and this is definitely a 5-star story so far. I wanted to give you 5 stars, I wish I still could, if only this site would let us backtrack I'd do it in a flash. Sorry, mea culpa.
great
keep it coming ! !
A quirky comment
It's funny how you read a story and one little insignificant detail can niggle at your brain.
They go out to an opera house that you said was built in 1880. They have a 4-seat private box all to themselves, and the thing that I couldn't get past was Ro flipping up the armrest between them. I just can't imagine that a hall built 1880 would have modern day stadium-style seating in private boxes. I would think that such an old building would have individual (and probably antique) chairs in the private boxes. I guess my frame of reference is President Lincoln's box at Ford's Theater, which is also from that era.
In the grand scheme of this wonderful story, it's a trivial detail, and yet -- in this chapter -- my mind chose to fixate upon that as being out of place.
It's odd how one's mind works at times.
Still, I felt the story was a 5-star effort.
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