The Blossom in the Snow Pt. 02

interesting story

Still so many unanswered questions but that's what makes me want to keep reading

AWESOME

Better than the last one but still short. Also, he always seems to get out of the house when its dark.

Get an editor.

The first chapter was very promising, but the quality has dipped in this part. This chapter was hard enough to follow even without the confusion coming from the fact that "Steward", "Stewart" and "Stuart" were all the same person. I know it's a rush when you've had positive reviews and you want to get a new chapter out ASAP but taking the time to proof-read really is worth it.

I don't find it confusing but I do find it annoying that the main character is so stupid. He makes ridiculously poor choices. He doesn't call the police..okay that's fine. But then, he goes in and packs 'for hours' when the guy is supposed to come back for him. Grab necessary shit, go to a hotel and find the place to stay from there. Then he runs to the park the guy knows he goes to and sits under a light so he's easy to spot. STUPID. please have him make choices that don't make the reader say 'this guy deserves to be caught.'
Also, it kinda didn't make sense that a guy in his 30's helped raise him. he'd have been in his early 20's and had to support the kid and have an 11 y/o lliving alone. It just didn't seem to make sense. If he were older, then it might make a bit more sense. I think a beta reader would be good to catch things like that.
I'm wondering who the man in black is. I can't wait to see. He should be able to find him easiy enough LOL Keep writing.

It's exciting but please edit

I'm eager to see where this goes. Again, the mistakes are annoying. It's 'shaking', a 'shack' is a building. And the Stewart, Stuart and Steward ????
Please proof read and check your mistakes first before posting again. I understand your need to get the chapters out but I'd rather wait a few days and have a well written chapter, than a rush job with no thought or editing. I'm sure most readers would agree.

Edit please

Its a great start but seriously all those different spelling for Stuart? Stick to one please. The story itself has great potential but needs a bit more thought put into it. Like trying to make Stuart a little smarter and not do the stupidest things after someone attacks him lol. Keep writing please :)