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My Eyes Are Closed

byBreakTheBar©
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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous02/12/15

5 stars!!!

Awesome!! More please!!!

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by randyolegoat02/12/15

WOW!!!!!!!

I loved this one. I rarely give five stars but I'd like to give this one a ten.
Sequel please.........................

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by Anonymous02/12/15

Yes!!!

Amazing story. So well written. Can't wait to read more from the author.

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by Anonymous02/12/15

Awesome

I am so wet after reading this, I wish my brother would fuck me like that. Mmmmm here's hoping.

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by Anonymous02/12/15

great story

but PLEASE You really want us to believe that they thought he slept through all the pic taking #REALLY

PS
"Polaroid Camera" in 2015 really

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by Anonymous02/13/15

wow!!

enjoyed the read. you should continue with the story.

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by Averygoodlay02/13/15

Loved it

However they had to be pretty dumb to think he was asleep the whole time and he had to have a will of iron to stay still.
Now they have the rest of the week to play around and he and his sister have a lifetime.

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by Anonymous02/13/15

Awesome story!!

Fantastic story!! You must continue it on since the folks are away!

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by ammoman02/13/15

Only One Negative....

The word is "taut" not "taught."

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by Anonymous02/13/15

GRRRREAT

This story should continue for the next two weeks... (at least)
He should snag a copy of the photos, too!

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by prop6902/13/15

fantastic story

every young man has a dream like this

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by Anonymous02/13/15

Wow!

Fantastic and sexy and erotic as hell story! Have the girls finger his butthole next while his sister blows him.

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by Anonymous02/14/15

fun read 5 keks

The one thing that was missing was a whisper.

Nancy gets down, and all he says is "better than my dreams"

The hooting and hollering that would have followed wouldve rocked my jollies harder than a Scorpions album

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by Turbulence197302/16/15

Excellent

LOVE THIS STORY! It was hot, erotic and built well in the rhythm. I do hope you continue this story line.

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by wolf969602/16/15

5/5

nuf said

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by rightbank02/18/15

credibility GAP

only someone 13 or under would believe this possible even if drugged or blackout drunk. And if that drunk, there would be no erections. Nor would he be able to hold off his own climax during multiple blow jobs and being ridden by three women through their own orgasms while he is pretending to be asleep.
I call BS

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by Nex202/23/15

Loved this short story, you have talent for writing some seriously hot scenes, great job.

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by Anonymous05/11/15

more

Just loved the story, please continue it on to the next morning and what has opens between the brother and sister

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by Anonymous05/29/15

Very good. Please continue it with just Nancy and her brother

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by drvrkev206/06/15

Great Story

Definetely continue this story Please. With the sister and Erin. They would all have fun together.

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by Anonymous06/10/15

Good story...

But you need an editor. Too many wrongly spelled words ia distracting.

It's ANTE, not ANTY.

You meant FAZED,

And you mix up YOUR with YOU'RE both ways.

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by saintmichael9506/12/15

Damn!

This was actually really good!!!

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by Droid12107/28/15

More! Now with Nancy's first anal.

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by rightbank07/28/15

narcolepsy

the only reason I can think of for him falling asleep on the floor with three beautiful, naked, and willing young ladies in the room.

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They've got a week before the 'rents get back & the night isn't over

A fun romp w a happy ending. I found this to be an enjoyable story. Much better than a simple bump-n-squirt episode. I think this is complete all by itself but there is the possibility of further explorations between the four of them.

Thank you for sharing your creative efforts with us!

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by Anonymous04/23/16

Really good story

I really enjoyed the story, and want more. I think there is room for more between the brother and sister along with her friends.

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by JDez05/04/16

Like everyone else said this was great! I definitely would be interested in more to the story! Hope u can think of more

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by Anonymous07/03/16

sequel needed

Great story. Definitely needs to finish out the week with a daily story.

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by prop6907/05/16

Story was so good I READ IT AGAIN

Then jacked off..Love to hear a story of the morning after

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by J_Reader_Comics07/19/16

Re-Read hehe

So, since I have a tendency to like so many stories, I tend to look back at ones I have read and re-read them. Having read this one more than a few times already, I thought I would post a comment. This is quite the entertaining one-off story. I do hope that a potential sequel to it is in the offing. It has such potential with the four characters. You have done great work with your other pieces, and I know you could turn this into more if you desired to. If not, well at least we have this story to read or re-read in my case lol.

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by Anonymous07/25/16

I agree

with the others about this being an amazing story and would love to see a sequel if you ever feel the need someday. I also just finished re-reading this, the first time was months ago lol, always did enjoy it though and it definitely has potential to be made into a series here. But as others have said, even if you don't, it's still an amazing story and is fine as a one-off, though if you ever continue it I'll read and reread the next part(s) for sure! Sure there were some spelling / grammar errors here and there but it wasn't enough to really detract from the story. I'd much rather have a good, quality story with a few editing mistakes here and there any day of the week over a story with no errors but isn't written well. You're a great writer, loe this and your other works, keep it up!

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by Anonymous08/31/16

Loved it

Loved it it made me quite wet reading it. Bj xo

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by Anonymous10/25/16

Brilliant

Loved it, I will certainly be re-reading it. Perfect length and level of detail. Good writing and look forward to reading more of your stuff. Well done!

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