Brotherly Love

Good one!

I would sure like to read more!!

nice clit hanger!! ;)

brotherly love....+

Come on ! You needed to give us more on your first chapter.
next time, give us a bigger page or two !

Dang.

That was kind of a great ending. More. There's gotta be more.

Yes, a very nice start in the 1st chapter. Obviously, since Aaron gave his younger sister who was unaware of her feelings and how to act on them plus the app now to use and then finishing with the look on her face "O" ...
Hopefully, Squirt will have to ask him to show her more and he should.

I think the next chapter will be very HOT for all ......... cannot wait. Thank You !!

Disappointed

The story was too short and there was no sense of conclusion. It was a disappointing tease. You need to add more next time

by mistake

gave it a 5 instead of the 2 the story deserved

Promising start, would like to see where it goes.

Only the first chapter I hope?

This could be expanded on in so much more detail.
Give it a go.

wonderful start

Beautifully written. This definitely is a piece that I would love to see a second chapter added on to. You've left my brother and me wanting more. . .

OK

It was a nice tease. There's nothing wrong with a short story. Could this be fleshed out? Yes. Does it have to be? Never. I enjoyed it.

Come on man

You ask for feedback its been almost a year wheres the next chapter come on

Oh fuck me!! Where's chapter two?!? You're killing me! All that great buildup, me looking forward to something really juicy here and BAM! Dead end! Damn :(

Quarter way there

Like Mike2501 said . . . . . Where's the rest??

I voted 2 stars for a great beginning/buildup . . . . but, without a follow up, it's just rubbish.