Come on ! You needed to give us more on your first chapter.
next time, give us a bigger page or two !
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Anonymous02/13/15
Dang.
That was kind of a great ending. More. There's gotta be more.
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Anonymous02/13/15
Yes, a very nice start in the 1st chapter. Obviously, since Aaron gave his younger sister who was unaware of her feelings and how to act on them plus the app now to use and then finishing with the look on her face "O" ...
Hopefully, Squirt will have to ask him to show her more and he should.
I think the next chapter will be very HOT for all ......... cannot wait. Thank You !!
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Anonymous02/13/15
Disappointed
The story was too short and there was no sense of conclusion. It was a disappointing tease. You need to add more next time
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Good one!
I would sure like to read more!!
nice clit hanger!! ;)
brotherly love....+
Come on ! You needed to give us more on your first chapter.
next time, give us a bigger page or two !
Dang.
That was kind of a great ending. More. There's gotta be more.
Yes, a very nice start in the 1st chapter. Obviously, since Aaron gave his younger sister who was unaware of her feelings and how to act on them plus the app now to use and then finishing with the look on her face "O" ...
Hopefully, Squirt will have to ask him to show her more and he should.
I think the next chapter will be very HOT for all ......... cannot wait. Thank You !!
Disappointed
The story was too short and there was no sense of conclusion. It was a disappointing tease. You need to add more next time
by mistake
gave it a 5 instead of the 2 the story deserved
Promising start, would like to see where it goes.
Only the first chapter I hope?
This could be expanded on in so much more detail.
Give it a go.
wonderful start
Beautifully written. This definitely is a piece that I would love to see a second chapter added on to. You've left my brother and me wanting more. . .
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