I have no patience for First Person Present Tense, but you made this more palatable by at least using Past Tense.
It still was a little too much "stream of consciousness" for me to really love it. You could have been a little more descriptive, but you honestly did do a nice job here. I'll give it four stars, and hope you'll get better with more practice.
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Anonymous02/13/15
One of the best
One of the best stories that I've read in a while. Thank you
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Anonymous05/29/15
Do you know grammer or know how to spell?
Yes I liked the story but spell check it and proof read it, please. Thank you for the story.
English
I have no patience for First Person Present Tense, but you made this more palatable by at least using Past Tense.
It still was a little too much "stream of consciousness" for me to really love it. You could have been a little more descriptive, but you honestly did do a nice job here. I'll give it four stars, and hope you'll get better with more practice.
One of the best
One of the best stories that I've read in a while. Thank you
Do you know grammer or know how to spell?
Yes I liked the story but spell check it and proof read it, please. Thank you for the story.
are you reding the story or marking 4 A GCSE
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