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Bi Bi Valentin

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by Anonymous02/14/15

hot

Turns me on

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by Anonymous02/14/15

Halfway through just had to mention

I don't know if English is a second language to you, if so then it's very well written just a fair few grammatical, tense and spelling errors that ruin the flow of what is otherwise a great tale.
For example you put worm instead of warm, after words instead of afterwards and probably the most important Valentin's instead of Valentine's. As a valentine's story it stops the pace of the story as it's used so often.
As I mentioned if English isn't your native tongue then keep practising and you'll have a perfect story technique.

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by Anonymous02/14/15

Worm feeling?

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