Font of Fertility Ch. 02

Plot Hole

Don't get me wrong, I loved the story. It was intense. Great writing on almost every account. But you left one plot hole open. What happens when his friends all see that he now looks like an athlete from his formerly chubby state? How does he explain that away? You said it was years of exercise worth of muscle built up. Got some 'splanin to do. Hope you can work it into the next chapter, and please keep them coming!

i gave it a five

I disagree with the other comment. You mentioned maybe a few more muscles than a swimmer's body. With clothes on, he's not gonna look that different, and if asked about not looking so chubby, it's easy to say you've been dieting and working out.

Not a plot hole yet

It will only be a plot hole if he doesn't explain it and work int the reactions. About the new look into the story. Love the story very excited for the next installment, this is getting my own creative juices flowing so to speak thank you! My personally writers block is lifted and I'll be able to continue my own personal writing, many thanks from writers with writers block everywhere!

Loving it so far...

...keep it up!

Another 5* chapter.

U r an amazing writer cant wait to read your next chapter

wow

New fav set of stories in literotica hats off to you sir

Amazing

This story is awesome. Please continue writing! You've got me hooked!

Can't wait for more!

To FUN!

Dream a little dream

Wowzers. Sex magic at its finest. So, someone(s) woke up a little early, a bit hot and bothered, then later he woke up bothered but not so hot.

The places this piece is going is nice. Take all the time you want getting wherever you're going. They'll will be time enough for the important stuff to take place. And I am very interested in the evolution that will place on our boy.

So good!

This is turning into a great series. I can't wait for it to continue!

Great stuff!

Its fun seeing this develop. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

Epic!!!

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will each chapter end in a cliff hanger?

If so, it could soon become annoying.
Too short
Nothing added to the magic portion of the story line.

ok to rightbank

you must have skiped the part were were he was told that he was one of the main three and would live untill he desided to off himself or gets unlucky and gets caught with out no juice to protect him self and the fact he changed his hole body type

Damn

but I love this story. It bears up well to multiple readings.

REALLY enjoying this story...fun hot horny teens and magic dick...

Very likable characters, smart dialogue , and I like the way she thinks...
"... wait, don't cum in me...it'll be dripping down my leg...cum in my mouth..."-true!

NB not to harsh their mellow post-buttfuck glow, and I know this is fun loving smut fiction, but newbies to booty pirating might get wrong idea reading this, going from backdoor to pussy with no protection bad idea, for her....

Still -5 + fave story
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RE:roverone

To soften the blow of your warning, maybe we can assume that they take for granted the fact that he can fix any health problems that arise from his bold reentry.

Good Call though.