for your comment. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. It's short because it's my first erotic story, and I wanted it be fresh on the page (I wrote it in less than an hour). If I'd worked more on it, I'd gain in detail and length but I would lose in authenticity as I'm not sure I'd have been able to resist embellishing. As it is, it's more or less what happened.
I agree, which is why I've resubmitted to be put into that category... still, it is a first time experience, and there's nothing wrong with first time gay sex...
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Anonymous02/20/15
Made...
me very horny :)
by
Anonymous02/21/15
realistic
sounds very real, i could have written it about my first encounter, and every first encounter since, very good.
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Anonymous03/27/15
undeserved low ratings.
I want to encourage you to continue in this vein of writing from experience. I think you story telling and attention to detail are excellently honed. Please keep at it. Your description on the ''draining of desire'' is an apt and insightful phrase. I'm going to be watching for your work in the future. Thanks for sharing.
I also want to encourage you to ignore the thoughtless criticism of angry snipers.
DOUG out
I liked, and snickered at that line. "He puts his thumb in front of my lips." The paragraph that follows is a masterpiece of mental rampage - most of us will admit that in times like these, the mind doesn't have any punctuation, no pauses, no rational continuity - just total randomly flashed images.
That's about the most perfect, and most subtle action to test the readiness of a beginner. Specially a beginning when both players appear to be off to less than favorable opening night - he overslept and his visitor was so unsure he was ready. You put together a charming introduction for a positive future. There was no humiliation for either partner. Kudos and stars. Tony Clarke
English
What I imagine ...
... my first time would be like. Loved this story ... it was a bit short, but otherwise excellent.
Thank you...
for your comment. I'm delighted you enjoyed it. It's short because it's my first erotic story, and I wanted it be fresh on the page (I wrote it in less than an hour). If I'd worked more on it, I'd gain in detail and length but I would lose in authenticity as I'm not sure I'd have been able to resist embellishing. As it is, it's more or less what happened.
Reminds me of my 1st time :)
Well written and very relateable... thanks! x
Appropriate Category
This should have been more appropriately posted under GAY MALE.
Hi Anonymous...
I agree, which is why I've resubmitted to be put into that category... still, it is a first time experience, and there's nothing wrong with first time gay sex...
Made...
me very horny :)
realistic
sounds very real, i could have written it about my first encounter, and every first encounter since, very good.
undeserved low ratings.
I want to encourage you to continue in this vein of writing from experience. I think you story telling and attention to detail are excellently honed. Please keep at it. Your description on the ''draining of desire'' is an apt and insightful phrase. I'm going to be watching for your work in the future. Thanks for sharing.
I also want to encourage you to ignore the thoughtless criticism of angry snipers.
DOUG out
Who's to Know - "Thumbs" Up
I liked, and snickered at that line. "He puts his thumb in front of my lips." The paragraph that follows is a masterpiece of mental rampage - most of us will admit that in times like these, the mind doesn't have any punctuation, no pauses, no rational continuity - just total randomly flashed images.
That's about the most perfect, and most subtle action to test the readiness of a beginner. Specially a beginning when both players appear to be off to less than favorable opening night - he overslept and his visitor was so unsure he was ready. You put together a charming introduction for a positive future. There was no humiliation for either partner. Kudos and stars. Tony Clarke
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