Strange girl comes onto man she's never met and strips in an instant to get fucked? OK for a fantasy, but as a suggested story, I don't believe it. Ditto earlier comments, Dad wasn't teaching at all, just getting his rocks off.
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Anonymous02/20/15
Best I can do is an ace
Total stranger walks in the door drops her lingerie and tells the old man she wants him to teach her about sex,, I mean come on , reallly
And what does he teach her, fuck all and nothing , the creep gets his nut and thats it
You can even kick them to the curb. Go to your submissions panel, and moderate the comments. Delete the ones you don't like. You are the author. You have control.
I thought the story was passionate. A little more setup, but for some of us the immediacy works. Just a few more hints of what drives Beth, her motivation, Daddy issues, a bad breakup from a bastard that told her she wasn't any good in bed and had too much to learn for him to teach her - that would have explained what she did. Maybe an insight she might not have free and unrestricted to a hot older guy. You've thought of these things, give them to your readers.
Anonymous doesn't have the talent to write, or they would do it. Signups are free here on Literotica. Write, then rewrite. The first version of a story is never the full story. Enhance, use your senses, tell us everything they felt, thought, smelled, tasted.
But for goodness sake, you are too good a writer to stop here. Come back to the story and tell us about the next time they get together, or write the other hot stories you have in your head. But please be kind to me and write more stories, I love reading yours.
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Anonymous02/21/15
Cock not hard since I cummed!
Liked it! Short and sweet! I don't quite know how a babe can understand the male system this well but Cecelia, you did a good enough and convincing enough job to make me cum in my shorts! What a deal - my daughter sure never had a friend like that - and it's a good thing she didn't!
You aren't constructive. You're the newbie here, not me. You don't contribute, you only tear down with your loathing and self hated.
Cecelia wrote the story. It is hers, not yours. You may like to think you and your dick are "all that", but they aren't. She has just as much right to delete your abusive comments as she would your abusive advances at a bar.
Be grateful, be polite to authors who write the stories you jack off to, or get your comments deleted. It isn't your choice.
You have the soul of a rapist who wants to force women to bear their children. Get lost.
Those not connected to the story. Those offering just hate and/or racism.
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Anonymous02/23/15
Loved It
A continuation please
Refreshing it wasn't soo drawn out to where it's painful
There will always be objectors easy fixed
USE the delete button
constructive feedback is healthy
nastiness is so destructive to the sender... if ONLY they knew.
Feel sorry for them.
Please continue to grace our reading
Thank You
ned
English
You lost me...
I was predicting myself looking forward & hoping for a multi-Chapter tale... Until she got to be "several inched" higher.
Hmm ...
Strange girl comes onto man she's never met and strips in an instant to get fucked? OK for a fantasy, but as a suggested story, I don't believe it. Ditto earlier comments, Dad wasn't teaching at all, just getting his rocks off.
Best I can do is an ace
Total stranger walks in the door drops her lingerie and tells the old man she wants him to teach her about sex,, I mean come on , reallly
And what does he teach her, fuck all and nothing , the creep gets his nut and thats it
Kick the Anonymous Comments to the curb
You can even kick them to the curb. Go to your submissions panel, and moderate the comments. Delete the ones you don't like. You are the author. You have control.
I thought the story was passionate. A little more setup, but for some of us the immediacy works. Just a few more hints of what drives Beth, her motivation, Daddy issues, a bad breakup from a bastard that told her she wasn't any good in bed and had too much to learn for him to teach her - that would have explained what she did. Maybe an insight she might not have free and unrestricted to a hot older guy. You've thought of these things, give them to your readers.
Anonymous doesn't have the talent to write, or they would do it. Signups are free here on Literotica. Write, then rewrite. The first version of a story is never the full story. Enhance, use your senses, tell us everything they felt, thought, smelled, tasted.
But for goodness sake, you are too good a writer to stop here. Come back to the story and tell us about the next time they get together, or write the other hot stories you have in your head. But please be kind to me and write more stories, I love reading yours.
Cock not hard since I cummed!
Liked it! Short and sweet! I don't quite know how a babe can understand the male system this well but Cecelia, you did a good enough and convincing enough job to make me cum in my shorts! What a deal - my daughter sure never had a friend like that - and it's a good thing she didn't!
To the Anonymous
You aren't constructive. You're the newbie here, not me. You don't contribute, you only tear down with your loathing and self hated.
Cecelia wrote the story. It is hers, not yours. You may like to think you and your dick are "all that", but they aren't. She has just as much right to delete your abusive comments as she would your abusive advances at a bar.
Be grateful, be polite to authors who write the stories you jack off to, or get your comments deleted. It isn't your choice.
You have the soul of a rapist who wants to force women to bear their children. Get lost.
Some "comments" should be deleted, we think.
Those not connected to the story. Those offering just hate and/or racism.
Loved It
A continuation please
Refreshing it wasn't soo drawn out to where it's painful
There will always be objectors easy fixed
USE the delete button
constructive feedback is healthy
nastiness is so destructive to the sender... if ONLY they knew.
Feel sorry for them.
Please continue to grace our reading
Thank You
ned
Short And HOT!!!!***
Thanks for sharing,
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