You've created a snapshot of a moment that is well done. Enough detail to set the picture in the readers mind and allow their own imagination to fill in the rest. Nice job. bearslady
The Emperor Joseph II said to Mozart "My dear young man, don't take it too hard. Your work is ingenious. It's quality work. And there are simply too many notes, that's all." And so I say it to you: too many unnecessary words
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You've created a snapshot of a moment that is well done. Enough detail to set the picture in the readers mind and allow their own imagination to fill in the rest. Nice job.
bearslady
Too many words
The Emperor Joseph II said to Mozart
"My dear young man, don't take it too hard. Your work is ingenious. It's quality work. And there are simply too many notes, that's all."
And so I say it to you: too many unnecessary words
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