I gave this series 4*'s for the subject matter alone. The most private and personal acts being shared between the characters is one of my all time fantasies. But the way in which you told the story doesn't quite cut it. There's no passion or outright nastiness to it. It's as if the acts are expected or normal and accepted as such. And you had to start every chapter by rehashing every detail from the previous one. It's a series! Anyone who picks up starting with chapter two or any of the others would figure that out if you simply kept the story flowing from one chapter to the next. This is the first of your work that I've read and I'm going to check out more of it hoping that your other stories are written a little better. Again, the subject matter is hot and kinky, a total turn on for me.
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great word
rapprochement. obscure and awesome. mad props
4*'s only for the subject matter
I gave this series 4*'s for the subject matter alone. The most private and personal acts being shared between the characters is one of my all time fantasies. But the way in which you told the story doesn't quite cut it. There's no passion or outright nastiness to it. It's as if the acts are expected or normal and accepted as such. And you had to start every chapter by rehashing every detail from the previous one. It's a series! Anyone who picks up starting with chapter two or any of the others would figure that out if you simply kept the story flowing from one chapter to the next. This is the first of your work that I've read and I'm going to check out more of it hoping that your other stories are written a little better. Again, the subject matter is hot and kinky, a total turn on for me.
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