The Ultimate Betrayal

Thanks***

For the read.

Meh

thanks for the offering.

Nice little story...

...her calling him an "incredibly dumb man" kind of hit the nail right on the head. Even being in love and halfway blind it is hard to believe all those stories she had sold him. By the way: Wouldn´t a phone call to her school concerning this "new system" cleared everything quite fast? So instead he limited his inquieries to his own school...as she said:An "incredibly dumb man"

Half way decent story..

At least not a wimp story.

I have read quite a few of your stories, and.....

I want to encourage you. I haven't liked many of them, BUT, what I want to say is that almost everytime, I see you making improvement. Previously, my criticisms were about character development. Again, while THIS story may not feature the BEST character development that there ever was, what it DOES feature is an improvement from you in providing more development than in previous offerings. Again, your stories may not be in the the top tier (yet?), but I always enjoy watching (reading) an author who is making progress. Yes, you are getting better. Yes, keep going. Make those characters come alive, and jump off the page. Don't give up. While you may still have a long way to go, don't forget how far you have already come, in just a few short months. Whatever your personal reasons for writing, don't let ANYBODY discourage you in continuing with it.

Thanks for your efforts in continually trying to improve your product. I think it is paying off for you. Good Work!.

i guess

Youre dumb if you cant recognize ur wifes voice.

Still

I think it would have been good for the readers to hear the wife's reaction to the divorce and her relationship with Doug. Thanks for your efforts.

Good Story

It reads to me like an LW/BTB without violence. A bit simplistic but entertaining

Almost a Flash Story

I would say that wifey-poo got what she deserved, however, I am sure that she blames her ex husband for all of her troubles.

ehh

Not well rounded, needed more, but one of your better attempts at futility If you can't write the entire story don't bother

Kind of unbelievable

First of all,no school,even a private school,would hold 'leadership' conferences more than once a year,and this was according to the story,a school not exactly great.....the guy is a teacher,and you think he wouldn't know that such meetings are fairly rare,as are night meetings and such.Plus,given how long she was doing this (remember,she was seeing douchebag for 5 years),she would have been fired a long time ago assuming she took days off to see him.And of course,he couldn't recognize his wife's voice?plus how many married couples keep their finances totally separate like that?

Too many out there plot points to make this really work.

Finally, a cuck gets it right,

Atlas, the wicked slut has nobody but it is really the kid that gets the fucked-over version of life. Sad but true. Well done, author.

can I have the 30 seconds back I wasted reading this shit?

wow... awful..

Nice

Well the stupid cunt got almost all she wanted. She had a baby with her lover. However, her "dumb" husband knew she was trying to get pregnant and he knew he wasn't the father so she was cheating. Another stupid cunt. The lover also.

Although there were signs screaming at Scott that something was going on with Jane he ignored them because he thought she loved him and would never hurt him. He was in denial. We all have been there. Some of us figure it out sooner then others.

One of the other comments questioned how many married couples have separate finances? I do...My husband and I shared a checking account early in the marriage and I had my open savngs account. I later had my own checking account and he had his. We just agreed to pay the monthly bills each pay day. It worked better that way. And I know of others that do the same.

Did this get posted in the wrong category?

Good story though.

there is a truth here

none so blind as those in love. at least he got away clean.

Not a bad story

It seems impossible for such a deceit to go on. And having this guy's baby . Him getting alimony after he quit his job.? But for the males in this world , this outcome while fantastic. Never really happens. The way you wrote this it had to. Be
An at fault state. In most states the split would be 50-50. Can she be so deceitful and still live with herself and take care of a baby? Not a probability .

PROSPEROUS NEVER DESCRIBES WINNERS OR LOSERS

state of mind might lead to the goals set. TK U MLJ LV NV

Head up his ass

And an unbelievable PUSSY!!! Anyone that fucking oblivious never had a marriage to begin with, and clearly, they were never married in Jane's mind. Yes, she's an evil cunt; but Pussy let it happen, and I find him nearly as contemptible.

Lame

“It might have been Jane but I couldn't be sure.” – He couldn’t recognize her voice?

How Dumb is the husband?

How does this guy get his pants on by himself in the morning. Can't recognize his own wife's voice. Come on, he can't be that dumb. She is gone as much as she is home and he does not know anything about where she is. No wonder she cheats.

Cunt!

GOOD! ~ The twat got exactly what she deserved!

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fag cuck shit.

Pathetic

Did you put ANY thought into your plot?

Damn

It took a while but the dumb idiot finally discovered she was just playing him. Fucking cunt got what she deserved.

true story

One affair of serial cheating wife detailed on Facebook profile of dearbornmt@yahoo.com
Would make good story line for you

i say its the husbands fault.....let me explain why

not the fact she was a round heeled slut, not thats not his fault, his fault lies in the fact that men think of women as delicate, creatures who need love & care. well they are not, they are just as the asshole you hate at work, they are just as sexist as you, & they also do have the same level of biases preconceived notions as you, finally they shit the same as you.... what am getting at is a woman is just a dude who you are attracted to, (may be that means your gay......;-) )

also check this out it shows how no media talks about this
http://www.wnd.com/2007/03/40665/

eh???

he didn't recognise his wife? her voice?

1*

Another illiterate WHORE posting cuck shit.

Finally!

So few times does a cheating slut get what she honestly deserves. No job. Beaten by her lover. Lover in jail (and husband in no way connected). Even 30-70 split was overly generous. But divorce courts are nothing more than legalized pimps. Ahhhh. Every once in awhile....JUSTICE IS SERVED. Worthy of 5 Stars!