An old underground comic -- I think it was by Ralph Reese -- had a grizzled flyblown prospector hook up with a MILF whore ending with: "Son?" "Ma?" and saloon bystanders asking, "Why him?". That long-remembered ending drove this whole story, which I wrote in 2 spurts about 8 months apart. I think I put enough snark into it. The sister and sisters bits are pure fiction, uh huh; the settings are all real. The people are all based on somebody. That's life.
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Anonymous10/25/15
why aren't there more comments on this funny, creative story?
I like it that Jack's sister Flora "impaled herself deeply on his throbbing cunt-splitter in one smooth lunge." It's so cool when a sister thinks of her big brother's big fat penis as a "cunt-splitter"--an instrument to split her sisterly cunt and send her into seventh heaven. And Flora sure appreciates Jack's "big wet loads"--all that glorious semen filling up her slit from his heavy hanging brotherly balls. Best is that Jack finally gets to blow a big wet load up his own ma's vagina. A sister's slit is sweet, but nothing beats a mother's warm wet ever-loving twat.
I must admit this isn't what I expected, but it is a fast paced, fun filled little tale and a very different story from this site's usual fare. I see you have written a lot of others so I'll have to check some of them out. Thanks.
I gotta give this a five for originality. Sorry it can't be a 10.
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Anonymous10/27/15
OUTSTANDING!
Exceptional quality writing. You really have a mastery of words. I suspect you have tried writing beyond erotica as well. I would love to read those works of yours too.
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Anonymous06/03/16
Yep
What "Outstanding" said goes for me, too.
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Anonymous07/05/16
Mistake!!
I accidentally hit the 4 stars when I intended to hit the 5 stars!! I'm really sorry! This story was funny and so well written with a terrific command of the English language. I can hardly wait to read all of this writer's stories. Also, Literotica stopped allowing me to post under my name after I've been doing it for over a year since I discovered this site and registered. I've asked for help but Literotica hasn't responded. If anyone can help me, I'm Samantha at Samantha_123@hushmail.com. Thanks.
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An old underground comic -- I think it was by Ralph Reese -- had a grizzled flyblown prospector hook up with a MILF whore ending with: "Son?" "Ma?" and saloon bystanders asking, "Why him?". That long-remembered ending drove this whole story, which I wrote in 2 spurts about 8 months apart. I think I put enough snark into it. The sister and sisters bits are pure fiction, uh huh; the settings are all real. The people are all based on somebody. That's life.
why aren't there more comments on this funny, creative story?
I like it that Jack's sister Flora "impaled herself deeply on his throbbing cunt-splitter in one smooth lunge." It's so cool when a sister thinks of her big brother's big fat penis as a "cunt-splitter"--an instrument to split her sisterly cunt and send her into seventh heaven. And Flora sure appreciates Jack's "big wet loads"--all that glorious semen filling up her slit from his heavy hanging brotherly balls. Best is that Jack finally gets to blow a big wet load up his own ma's vagina. A sister's slit is sweet, but nothing beats a mother's warm wet ever-loving twat.
WOW!
I must admit this isn't what I expected, but it is a fast paced, fun filled little tale and a very different story from this site's usual fare. I see you have written a lot of others so I'll have to check some of them out. Thanks.
At least a five
I gotta give this a five for originality. Sorry it can't be a 10.
OUTSTANDING!
Exceptional quality writing. You really have a mastery of words. I suspect you have tried writing beyond erotica as well. I would love to read those works of yours too.
Yep
What "Outstanding" said goes for me, too.
Mistake!!
I accidentally hit the 4 stars when I intended to hit the 5 stars!! I'm really sorry! This story was funny and so well written with a terrific command of the English language. I can hardly wait to read all of this writer's stories. Also, Literotica stopped allowing me to post under my name after I've been doing it for over a year since I discovered this site and registered. I've asked for help but Literotica hasn't responded. If anyone can help me, I'm Samantha at Samantha_123@hushmail.com. Thanks.
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