I love that you detail the 'mechanics' of the actions and do it so well. Sex at its most base is, well, basic. That's why so many of the words we use to describe it are single syllable words with hard ends (cock, fuck, etc). And you've captured that really well. You could go even further, next time...
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Anonymous03/24/15
awful...
While the premise held promise, the convoluted language, terrible grammar and glaring spelling mistakes made this almost impossible to read...about as painful as stubbing my toe, and considerably less erotic...
Hard to read
You obviously are an experienced writer but I found this story both hard to follow and hard to read.
Great read
Glad to warned us. I was behind and this gave me a chance to catch up.
As always you weave a wonderful story. Evey guy wishes he was the guy in the story.
Wish you would post some current pictures.
That was a wonderfully erotic read.
I love the descriptions in this story
I love that you detail the 'mechanics' of the actions and do it so well. Sex at its most base is, well, basic. That's why so many of the words we use to describe it are single syllable words with hard ends (cock, fuck, etc). And you've captured that really well. You could go even further, next time...
awful...
While the premise held promise, the convoluted language, terrible grammar and glaring spelling mistakes made this almost impossible to read...about as painful as stubbing my toe, and considerably less erotic...
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