Project MCX: The Mission Pt. 04

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Interesting. This is the kind of shit real parasitic insects get up to all the time, especially the Spider Wasp and the Jewel Wasp, and a bit more realistic than the usual story you get from the likes of Homealone_447, whose story usually end with some variation on "and then they happily kept breeding and orgasming for the rest of their lives".

Glad you're enjoying it. Pleased that you noted the realism I try to keep. When I write erotic horror, I try to adhere to some rules.

First, there has to be a reason for the monsters to desire human females. Cross-species reproduction is rare in nature, so for this to happen there must be a need for this to happen (specifically to mate with humans).

Second, much erotic horror tries to end up with a quasi-happily-ever-after ending, as you pointed out. I understand the desire to not see characters killed, but in my opinion this often dilutes the horror of the story. As a genre, most characters at the beginning of a horror story do not make it to the end. No one would've cared about Jason Voorhees if he claimed only one or two victims per Friday 13th movie.

Third, multiple matings with the human females would be more efficient to the monsters. Thus, going back to the first rule, if such encounters are fatal there must also be a reason for this to be the case. There is a reason the insect young eat their hosts, beyond the immediate need to feed. There are hints in the Mission story, but if I go on to the next one it will be explained in detail.

Fourth, characterization actually makes an impact. One-off stories are entertaining, but to know the who/why/how of the character (over time and not summarized in a paragraph or two) I found actually enhances the effect. I don't aim for deep characters, but some personality can make his/her death or survival that much more significant. Importantly, trauma needs to be real to them, specifically how they deal with it. If there are survivors they are psychologically damaged by their experiences.

Anyhow, just submitted Part 5 so I'm rather worn out for the night. I apologize if I blathered on too much, but I do try to reply to my readers lol. Hope that you keep on enjoying the story :)

Great story, one note you used Emily's name in place of Cammy's which led to a brief moment of confusion. Otherwise fairly solid and the story is definitely playing out like a great sci-fi horror.

Thanks for that catch on the names. Surprised that one got by me, since I go over each chapter twice before posting it. There is truth to authors not being their own best editors, but I try.

As for the future of the story, that's hit a bit of a snag here. Part 5 was rejected due to dealing with death. To summarize, Martin is chased through the insect nest. He is not alone down there, encountering other potential victims brought by the insects. Now knowing what the insects' true intentions are he has to decide whether or not to try to save them. He is not as good of a person as Brea sees him.

I understand Literotica's position, but I disagree with their assessment. Martin knows what will happen if he doesn't intervene, and while there are deaths they are not shown. He hears the screaming, forcing him to recognize the consequences of his choice. Again, death is heavily implied and omni-present but not actually shown. Knowledge and the reactions to such knowledge of what sort of monsters the insects are is what I show.

I admit disappointment...and discouragement. Doesn't seem to be an appeal process, but Google searching the title does bring up results elsewhere. The story will continue, sadly even if not here.

A bullet to the brain would be more humane

Than winding up as food
For an insect brood.

Yes, that is part of what makes these insects true monsters. Not only are their intentions sinister, but they have the means to make their victims be unable to resist them.

And as pointed out, there are insects that do these sort of things in real life. The difference is that we are too big for them, at least right now...

Nice rhyme, btw :P