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by Anonymous02/25/15

I'd love to see you get an editor. There are alot of mistakes which are easily fixed and would make the read smoother. I am still looking forward to finding out how 'mother' is nate's mom and how he grew up with the other woman as his mom. Why did she kill his father? Did damon live? will he tell Nate she's his mom?

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by echoi199502/26/15

Heyyy, sorry with all the grammatical errors... I was totally rushing with this story. I'll definitely try to make the next one better and smoother! Thanks for your constructive criticism!

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