I've loved it fron the first word to the last. Many other authors may have kept on running with the story even when the spark had dimmed, others rush to the end shi fast it leaves the reader unsatisfied. I'm very glad you did neither. This was an aging enact story with so many of the remarkable points of good drama. I appreciate that you wrote it and hope you write again. I'm sure I'll enjoy that just as much.
This story needs to be available to a wider audience and a publisher could do that. It would make a great movie too. I really look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you!
by
Anonymous02/25/15
One of the greatest stories in this category. Period.
The way you express the love these two characters have for each other, just makes me wish I had that kind of love. The way you've written the story and all the dilemmas you have created for the characters are what makes the story real. 5/5 Expect me to come back and read it again.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
Reading this story seemed like I was actually there... Their guardian angel that hoped them for the best. Rarely do I ever have emotions at the very conclusion of a story. Ive realized that not only did this one show my emotions, but every story in this series made me actually shed a tear for Jamie and Owen. I can honestly say and am hoping for a sequel if you have time. Maybe, the story jumps forward, and they have kids who express the same love as them or something? Maybe I'm just being selfish about not wanting this to end, but at least I can say this is one of the top 3 series I've ever read. Best of wishes to you, and I hope you continue writing in one aspect or another.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
Ditto on what he said about wider audience
Classic end , beautifully written n narrated. contact lit user xxwizardxx i think thats his username. i know its wizard but dnt know if its like that, look for him, he can help u out, also try selena kit n ravenfox. they are also published and a lit erotica author.
good luck to you. ty for a great story .
that was the most god awful stupid nah i just playing that was awesome,but as a denver fan i can see why he didnt go to the broncos even if it would have been good for me.just did it have to be miami gag
by
Anonymous02/25/15
great story and great ending hope u publish more stories like this.
Thank you SOOOO... much for sharing this amazingly wonderful story series with us you really did a great job over here no doubt it's one of the best on literotica Good luck for more and you could write novels for real and publish them you are a wonderful Writer.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
A erotic book
Needs to be on the shelves of a book store. Every chapter was great. I couldn't wait for the next one. Now i have to ry and print all the chapters for future reading
by
Anonymous02/25/15
WONDERFUL
The story was wonderful. Every chapter always kept me wanting more. I truly love the way you slowly built the story and showed how they didn't have a easy road. I hope you do pick up the story at a later time as there are a few things I would like to know what happen. Like did Jamie mother ever try to get in touch with her after the truth came out? How did all the other people who knew that they were cousins handle it. Also it would be nice to see where life has taken them after saying I DO.
Keep up the great writing and looking forward to read more of your stories.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
Sorry, so sorry that
it had to end, but it was the right time.
superb writing and story telling.
Enjoyed this from beginning to now. I knew it had to end some time, although I had hoped for maybe 1 or 2 more chapters. Good Job. I believe I'll add your name to my "Favorites". Thank you!
by
Anonymous02/25/15
Wonderfully incredible story
Loved it, loved it, loved it. I have read the entire series and delighted in each and every chapter. Seems a bit sad for the end to come, but hopefully the inkwell of ideas will continue for many years into the future for you.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
Ending
All good stories must end some time. Let is all hope this is just a pause and not an ending.
There is much ordinary writing on this site, but there is very little excellent writing. This has been excellent.
I hate that the story is ending, but I love the way it ended. Thank you for such a beautiful tale. If you decide to do a followup series, I WILL read it.
This has been a joyous ride from high school, through college, and on to professional lives that matter and a beautiful wedding that will shine in their lives forever. Thank you for writing this story, and allowing us to read it.
I know you will continue to write. I hope you will continue to share. Thank you.
by
Anonymous02/25/15
It's the way you write
When you can visualize the story and feel the emotion in it, that is perfection!!!
I have loved reading this story and hope you will in time add more to it.
But a beginning. I waited as each chapter unfolded. As said before, the inkwell awaits for the pen to taken up again. Simply put....Beautiful. TBC
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Anonymous02/25/15
Great job
The best and classiest story I've ever read on this site. It was done with so much feeling. If this is the end of this one I'll be watching and waiting for the next one.
Please don't wait too long.
My first thought was perfect. I am just hoping that you continue to write and that your next story will be even better. Good luck on that one and you are going to need it. You set the bar pretty high on that one.That was an excellent story. Thank you for taking the time to write this and share it with all of us.
I've followed this story from start to finish and have thoroughly enjoyed it. It saddens me to know it ends but all good things do. All I can hope for is too one day read a continuation to it. Good job and until then, I'll be sure to follow your work. Keep it up!
it is a true love story . a first love I had one somewhat like this story but my didn't end as well I had a mother that lied about her when I was in the navy and I believe my mother didn't fine out the truth till it was to late I look for her for over 20 years looking for her them it was to late ,she had died of cancer a few years before I heard where she was I have been to her grave and hope she hears me begging for her forgiveness
keep writing like this
Clarence
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Anonymous02/28/15
thank you
I loved every moment of every chapter. You had me worried there a few times, especially during their break but wow. What a story. Thank you so much for deciding to put it up!
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Anonymous03/01/15
Good Read
Can't believe I actually read something that long.
Thanks great story
That has to be one of the most moving stories I've ever read, either on here or elsewhere. You seem to know just how much sentimentality, affection, sex or emotion to put in so as to make the story flow and for it never to stall or get boring. Even though this is an erotica site, the main thread of the tale was equally as good even without the sex, that takes a great deal of skill and you have that by the bucket load.
I was lucky in that I read all 15 chapters without a break, I was hooked from chapter one and while I read it with pleasure I also wanted to make it last, getting to the end of a good story is always sad, which is how I feel now. But the really good thing is that you actually finished it , so many other stories on here draw you in, but for whatever reason, the author never finishes them. You have succeeded here on every count and you really are a very, very good author.
I do hope you find the inspiration to write a sequel in due course, but meanwhile I shall bookmark this so I can read it again at some future point.
Once again, thanks for a really great, emotional and sensitive story, well told and beautifully crafted.
of true romance. I couldn't stop reading it and was very glad you posted the whole story at one time. I liked the whole plot and really loved the development throughout. I kind of thought they might find out Buck wasn't her dad but am glad they decided not to open the results. It was a nice touch when they both were able to live their dreams at work as well as. Look forward to reading more of your writing.
This story was arguably one of the best stories I've seen in a long time. It had the ups and downs, it made you sad and then want to laugh. It ran the whole spectrum of emotion from beginning to end.
I also really loved the depth of description of locations. Having been to Paris and put a lock on that same bridge with my wife, made it even easier to connect with the story.
Can't wait for an addition to this story or a new story, it seems your writing gets better with every story.
This is by far the best story I have read on here! Great job and I will be reading your previous stories on this site as well. Thanks!
by
Anonymous03/11/15
Superlative
One, if not the best crafted, plotted and edited stories on the site. To place it in perspective at least on a par with Callicious' "Justin Thyme," but I think better. A genuine love story in the best tradition of romance.
It's done. A perfect love story, and nothing added could improve on it. Yes, some might be interested in some of the other characters and any offspring of Owen and Jamie, but really, you have crafted a masterpiece. I even learned a lot about football from reading it; what rich, complex detail at every stage.
Quite the story there. Well done. I always like the stories that focus on the ppl themselves and the build up to the things to come. Iv also always loved series in general. So this story hit both exceptionally well.
Although... considering some of the trouble they got in as teenagers.. i could only imagine that bachler party. lol
I loved this story, from start to finish I was hooked. Beautiful love story, and so full of passion and true feelings. Really enjoy your writing and the work you out into this.
Please continue to write more of the same, I'm a big fan. So hope you post more stories soon.
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Anonymous07/16/15
Thank You
Thank You for a wonderful story. You say that it's fiction, but there are too many details for it to be just a story. The devil is in the details. Either way it's a great read. Thank you again for sharing.
BOB
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Anonymous07/18/15
Leaves the reader wanting more
Good job. Well not good. It was one of the best stories I've ever read. The imagery of the story was excellent. I felt as if i was with Owen and Jamie throughout the story. I wish there was more to it. This story is legendary and legends never die. Maybe you should make a sequel. Please do.
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Anonymous12/13/15
PERFECT
I've never read anything like this before.
The things said by Jamie brought tears to my eyes.
PERFECT
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Anonymous01/03/16
Simply the best!
Thank you!! Best story I've read on here the last couple of years. Extra ordinary job.'
A wonderful story. One of the best I've read and I've been reading for over 60 years. I hope you continue to share your stories with us. I, for one, am very grateful.
I have not been able to put this down. A bit too much football stuff that an aussie finds difficult to understand but I coped. Jamie strikes me as a bit of a Nympho but with such love and tenderness that it works well. I hope to be able to read more like this in the future.
Thank you
by
Anonymous05/11/16
great story
just a great awesome story . the way it made me feel I was like part of the group of friends. in my 60s and stories don't normally get to me like this one did. thank you95
Finally a story of true love even though there were times I was going to end it and not finishing it but I'm glad I did. These are the stories I love as the incest is not wrong it's the love they knew was there not the other way round and the end was just where I hoped it would be. Just like a short story of later life if there are kids and so forth.
by
Anonymous08/14/16
Thank you
Truly great story. Thank you for sharing it with us and look forward to more from you. Absolutely deserved more than 5 stars. Again thank you for the time spent to provide hours of entertainment.
I'm really sorry, it's Not possible to rate more than 5 stars.
Thank you for this great story.
Sometimes touching, sometimes funny, always full of Emotions and Love.
by
Anonymous11/02/16
trust me
when I start scrolling thru the sex scenes to get back to the story .. it's good. Thanks kid / Scotty
This just has to be the best story I've read so far thank you.
by
Anonymous01/05/17
The best true love story ever
This is a great story of true love not compromised by multiple indiscriminate acts with other people, which, when reading those stories, leaves me cold.
You are a beautiful writer who sticks to what true love is all about.
Other contributors should take note.
Best story I have read on Literotica.
Well done. 6 stars.
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Anonymous01/16/17
True Love Conquers All
A truly great story. Someone else said that they skipped some of the sex scenes to get back to the story, I did the same. Without a doubt the best story I have read on this site. Please do more!
English
Amazing
I've loved it fron the first word to the last. Many other authors may have kept on running with the story even when the spark had dimmed, others rush to the end shi fast it leaves the reader unsatisfied. I'm very glad you did neither. This was an aging enact story with so many of the remarkable points of good drama. I appreciate that you wrote it and hope you write again. I'm sure I'll enjoy that just as much.
Get a Literary Agent
This story needs to be available to a wider audience and a publisher could do that. It would make a great movie too. I really look forward to reading more of your work. Thank you!
One of the greatest stories in this category. Period.
The way you express the love these two characters have for each other, just makes me wish I had that kind of love. The way you've written the story and all the dilemmas you have created for the characters are what makes the story real. 5/5 Expect me to come back and read it again.
Reading this story seemed like I was actually there... Their guardian angel that hoped them for the best. Rarely do I ever have emotions at the very conclusion of a story. Ive realized that not only did this one show my emotions, but every story in this series made me actually shed a tear for Jamie and Owen. I can honestly say and am hoping for a sequel if you have time. Maybe, the story jumps forward, and they have kids who express the same love as them or something? Maybe I'm just being selfish about not wanting this to end, but at least I can say this is one of the top 3 series I've ever read. Best of wishes to you, and I hope you continue writing in one aspect or another.
Ditto on what he said about wider audience
Classic end , beautifully written n narrated. contact lit user xxwizardxx i think thats his username. i know its wizard but dnt know if its like that, look for him, he can help u out, also try selena kit n ravenfox. they are also published and a lit erotica author.
good luck to you. ty for a great story .
that was the most god awful stupid nah i just playing that was awesome,but as a denver fan i can see why he didnt go to the broncos even if it would have been good for me.just did it have to be miami gag
great story and great ending hope u publish more stories like this.
Thak you....
Thank you SOOOO... much for sharing this amazingly wonderful story series with us you really did a great job over here no doubt it's one of the best on literotica Good luck for more and you could write novels for real and publish them you are a wonderful Writer.
A erotic book
Needs to be on the shelves of a book store. Every chapter was great. I couldn't wait for the next one. Now i have to ry and print all the chapters for future reading
WONDERFUL
The story was wonderful. Every chapter always kept me wanting more. I truly love the way you slowly built the story and showed how they didn't have a easy road. I hope you do pick up the story at a later time as there are a few things I would like to know what happen. Like did Jamie mother ever try to get in touch with her after the truth came out? How did all the other people who knew that they were cousins handle it. Also it would be nice to see where life has taken them after saying I DO.
Keep up the great writing and looking forward to read more of your stories.
Sorry, so sorry that
it had to end, but it was the right time.
superb writing and story telling.
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Excellent Story!
Enjoyed this from beginning to now. I knew it had to end some time, although I had hoped for maybe 1 or 2 more chapters. Good Job. I believe I'll add your name to my "Favorites". Thank you!
Wonderfully incredible story
Loved it, loved it, loved it. I have read the entire series and delighted in each and every chapter. Seems a bit sad for the end to come, but hopefully the inkwell of ideas will continue for many years into the future for you.
Ending
All good stories must end some time. Let is all hope this is just a pause and not an ending.
There is much ordinary writing on this site, but there is very little excellent writing. This has been excellent.
Like a beautiful woman walking away...
I hate that the story is ending, but I love the way it ended. Thank you for such a beautiful tale. If you decide to do a followup series, I WILL read it.
That Is Going Out On Top!
This has been a joyous ride from high school, through college, and on to professional lives that matter and a beautiful wedding that will shine in their lives forever. Thank you for writing this story, and allowing us to read it.
I know you will continue to write. I hope you will continue to share. Thank you.
It's the way you write
When you can visualize the story and feel the emotion in it, that is perfection!!!
I have loved reading this story and hope you will in time add more to it.
Not an ending
But a beginning. I waited as each chapter unfolded. As said before, the inkwell awaits for the pen to taken up again. Simply put....Beautiful. TBC
Great job
The best and classiest story I've ever read on this site. It was done with so much feeling. If this is the end of this one I'll be watching and waiting for the next one.
Please don't wait too long.
Wonderful
It been an amazing ride reading this series. I've been impressed with the characters and how well they were developed. Please keep up the great work.
Excellent
My first thought was perfect. I am just hoping that you continue to write and that your next story will be even better. Good luck on that one and you are going to need it. You set the bar pretty high on that one.That was an excellent story. Thank you for taking the time to write this and share it with all of us.
Thank You
What a wonderful story, One of the best that I have ever read here if not the best!
All I asked is more stories from you, do not leave us hanging for more as you next piece will be anticipated by many of your fan.
Man I'll miss reading about Owen and Jamie
Satisfying end to a great tale
Excellent story! Enough said.
Best story I've read in a long time
I've followed this story from start to finish and have thoroughly enjoyed it. It saddens me to know it ends but all good things do. All I can hope for is too one day read a continuation to it. Good job and until then, I'll be sure to follow your work. Keep it up!
A really perfect read!
This series has it all...THANKS!
great
it is a true love story . a first love I had one somewhat like this story but my didn't end as well I had a mother that lied about her when I was in the navy and I believe my mother didn't fine out the truth till it was to late I look for her for over 20 years looking for her them it was to late ,she had died of cancer a few years before I heard where she was I have been to her grave and hope she hears me begging for her forgiveness
keep writing like this
Clarence
thank you
I loved every moment of every chapter. You had me worried there a few times, especially during their break but wow. What a story. Thank you so much for deciding to put it up!
Good Read
Can't believe I actually read something that long.
Thanks great story
Thank-you !
That has to be one of the most moving stories I've ever read, either on here or elsewhere. You seem to know just how much sentimentality, affection, sex or emotion to put in so as to make the story flow and for it never to stall or get boring. Even though this is an erotica site, the main thread of the tale was equally as good even without the sex, that takes a great deal of skill and you have that by the bucket load.
I was lucky in that I read all 15 chapters without a break, I was hooked from chapter one and while I read it with pleasure I also wanted to make it last, getting to the end of a good story is always sad, which is how I feel now. But the really good thing is that you actually finished it , so many other stories on here draw you in, but for whatever reason, the author never finishes them. You have succeeded here on every count and you really are a very, very good author.
I do hope you find the inspiration to write a sequel in due course, but meanwhile I shall bookmark this so I can read it again at some future point.
Once again, thanks for a really great, emotional and sensitive story, well told and beautifully crafted.
Great story
of true romance. I couldn't stop reading it and was very glad you posted the whole story at one time. I liked the whole plot and really loved the development throughout. I kind of thought they might find out Buck wasn't her dad but am glad they decided not to open the results. It was a nice touch when they both were able to live their dreams at work as well as. Look forward to reading more of your writing.
One of the best
This story was arguably one of the best stories I've seen in a long time. It had the ups and downs, it made you sad and then want to laugh. It ran the whole spectrum of emotion from beginning to end.
I also really loved the depth of description of locations. Having been to Paris and put a lock on that same bridge with my wife, made it even easier to connect with the story.
Can't wait for an addition to this story or a new story, it seems your writing gets better with every story.
The BEST
This is by far the best story I have read on here! Great job and I will be reading your previous stories on this site as well. Thanks!
Superlative
One, if not the best crafted, plotted and edited stories on the site. To place it in perspective at least on a par with Callicious' "Justin Thyme," but I think better. A genuine love story in the best tradition of romance.
Thank you
It's done. A perfect love story, and nothing added could improve on it. Yes, some might be interested in some of the other characters and any offspring of Owen and Jamie, but really, you have crafted a masterpiece. I even learned a lot about football from reading it; what rich, complex detail at every stage.
Bravo.
Quite the story there. Well done. I always like the stories that focus on the ppl themselves and the build up to the things to come. Iv also always loved series in general. So this story hit both exceptionally well.
Although... considering some of the trouble they got in as teenagers.. i could only imagine that bachler party. lol
Great story
I loved this story, from start to finish I was hooked. Beautiful love story, and so full of passion and true feelings. Really enjoy your writing and the work you out into this.
Please continue to write more of the same, I'm a big fan. So hope you post more stories soon.
Thank You
Thank You for a wonderful story. You say that it's fiction, but there are too many details for it to be just a story. The devil is in the details. Either way it's a great read. Thank you again for sharing.
BOB
Leaves the reader wanting more
Good job. Well not good. It was one of the best stories I've ever read. The imagery of the story was excellent. I felt as if i was with Owen and Jamie throughout the story. I wish there was more to it. This story is legendary and legends never die. Maybe you should make a sequel. Please do.
PERFECT
I've never read anything like this before.
The things said by Jamie brought tears to my eyes.
PERFECT
Simply the best!
Thank you!! Best story I've read on here the last couple of years. Extra ordinary job.'
Thank you
A wonderful story. One of the best I've read and I've been reading for over 60 years. I hope you continue to share your stories with us. I, for one, am very grateful.
A most endearing story of true Love
I have not been able to put this down. A bit too much football stuff that an aussie finds difficult to understand but I coped. Jamie strikes me as a bit of a Nympho but with such love and tenderness that it works well. I hope to be able to read more like this in the future.
Thank you
great story
just a great awesome story . the way it made me feel I was like part of the group of friends. in my 60s and stories don't normally get to me like this one did. thank you95
Thank you
Finally a story of true love even though there were times I was going to end it and not finishing it but I'm glad I did. These are the stories I love as the incest is not wrong it's the love they knew was there not the other way round and the end was just where I hoped it would be. Just like a short story of later life if there are kids and so forth.
Thank you
Truly great story. Thank you for sharing it with us and look forward to more from you. Absolutely deserved more than 5 stars. Again thank you for the time spent to provide hours of entertainment.
Sorry...
I'm really sorry, it's Not possible to rate more than 5 stars.
Thank you for this great story.
Sometimes touching, sometimes funny, always full of Emotions and Love.
trust me
when I start scrolling thru the sex scenes to get back to the story .. it's good. Thanks kid / Scotty
Terrific
This just has to be the best story I've read so far thank you.
The best true love story ever
This is a great story of true love not compromised by multiple indiscriminate acts with other people, which, when reading those stories, leaves me cold.
You are a beautiful writer who sticks to what true love is all about.
Other contributors should take note.
Best story I have read on Literotica.
Well done. 6 stars.
True Love Conquers All
A truly great story. Someone else said that they skipped some of the sex scenes to get back to the story, I did the same. Without a doubt the best story I have read on this site. Please do more!
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