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UH OH, The start of something good.
I do hope you plan on continuing this intriguing tale. I wonder what and or whom she's running from? Will she ever see Mr. Tall, dark and take me away again? Please continue, this is definitely the start of something good.
Great start
Maybe a bit of editing to reach 5 stars but definitely looking out for the follow up
Loved your story
Very nice start glad to see there is a part 2 cannot wait, loved the interaction between them. She needs to do this,..
Loved your story
Very nice start glad to see there is a part 2 cannot wait, loved the interaction between them. She needs to do this,..
Thanks Everyone!
Thanks for the awesome feedback you guys. Im working on getting an editor so the chapters after 1 and 2 will be a bit more polished and will improve the story as a whole. If you have any suggestions of things you would like to see in the future, im open to them, I'd love to hear them! :)
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