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What the?
What the hell was this all about? No explanation of anything! I guess I should have never posted a story that wasn't complete. Now everyone wants to do it!
I also have a real problem showing a parent doing this type of stuff. Where were the kids? In the house? What disrespect! If this were real and I knew this woman I would pray she came down with syphilis! Her absence would not be mourned.
I have to agree with @ Chagrined...
I have to agree with @ Chagrined...A mother that cheats in her house, with the kids there, deserves to die...What if they wake in the middle of the night and go to the parents room? As I said Cheater with children, don't cheat only the spouse...they cheat also their children!!! A husband or wife that allows this, deserve to die too...With parents like these the children would be better orphans...1*... No need for the next parts...Better let this unfinished...
A new baboon
1* score
Beyond Parody
Anyone who writes "Wow. That was amazing." should find another line of work.
Interesting start
ZOMG! What is this story about extra-marital fun doing in a category for stories about extra-marital fun?!? This is the end of the world! You're heading for divorce! And STD's!! And what about the children? For the love of God, will someone please think about the children?!?!?!?
Kidding.
I'm enjoying the story so far, and looking forward to discovering how these characters ended up in this situation. You're a talented writer. Thanks for actually taking the time to contribute to this site, unlike the annonies who only come here to bash and preach.
yep, another sicko author.
Another prime example of the low standards of Literotica.
Deserves to die??? Impo you fucking goat-humping sicko.
What a slut this wife has become. Excellent 3*
5 great story and a great plot!1
fuck you annony you dickless fag
swingerjoe
Talk about preaching ?If that isnt the pot calling the kettle black.Even using bonnies terms (annonies).Whats next screaming Im giving this a 5!!!!!.As.for this Shakespearean epic its just an outline.Not finished Have to wait and see why hubby is a willing cuckold.Gee cant wait.No vote
More like a couple of paragraphs
Rather than a first chapter. Way too short to even be a decent introduction. UGH!
Lacked a few things
Lucdon wrote a decent sex scene here, but little else in this submission. That there was a husband in the house was pretty irrelevant as he only had a walk on part, so it probably belonged in erotic couplings. Beyond another sex scene, it's .hard to see this going anywhere as there is no conflict, drama or emotional components to the story.
But I'm not the author, so we'll see
Chilley
Crap
Just another cluck story... same old plot.... and you wonder why
they're even married...
I think swingerjoe is related to bonnie
Both have obvious issues. Gave it a 1 bonnie dear to offset your meaningless and worthless score. Anything you consider erotic I know is trash. Isn't this fun dear?
Seven stories posted in LW today
only one barely made it over 3 stars. What's that tell you about the quality of stories posted in loving wives today? Did all these writers crawl out of the same hole? No score, didn't read any of them.
How did it come to this?
If its something you would feel guilty about if others found out, maybe you shouldn't be doing it?
@ Whackdoodle
Maybe you should stop whacking your doodle -- unless you're okay with doing it in front of your kids.
Beyond Parody
Thanks Twentyseven
Maybe that bit wasn't a good choice of words.
If you decide to read on to subsequent chapters, you will probably find some other words which may also appear to be rather dated.
But then, I am no spring chicken and, as you will see, the story is set in the 1970s.
1*
Really?
On this site, and in this category ESPECIALLY.....
you HAVE to judge a story by its title. What sparked my curiousity, is the phrased "and Back" Ch. 01.
So hopefully there WILL be more to explain what you obviously left out of chapter one, right?
I might suggest longer chapters. And I think you need to spend more time with background to fill out the character development. This really wasn't much of a set up; we barely know ANYTHING about any of these players. Although...
Sad about what we DO know:
1)she could care less about using the marital bed
2)she is overall UNconcerned about the children being present in the house
3)I guess loverboy has a bigger dick than hubby
SOOOO.....
Just another selfish size queen slut wife who has brainwashed/strongarmed hubby into submission?
or
Just another selfish size queen slut wife who NEVER had any respect for anyone other than herself, and she is walking through life oblivious to all things and people around her?
Either way, so far, it seems that hubby is only needed for a paycheck and to cover the kids, since she is a negligable, irresponsible 'parent'.
What, am I wrong? Well, your stunningly brief chapter one gives me Zero information with which to form any other sort of opinion.
I AM curious about the potential for a described woman's journey BACK (from the darkside???). But unless your aim was to place her so far removed from reality that this is an unrelistic epic journey that no normal person could really concieve of, well then it seems that you have ALREADY set yourself up for failure in delivering on these kinds of goods. Chapters these short just can't tell a cohesive story.
Good Luck?! You'll need it!!!!!
Interesting Start
Thanks Swingerjoe
All is well, STDs were less of a problem in the '70s, divorce didn't happen and the children turned out OK.
I'm worried about some of the other commentators to this story however.
Maybe when they were children they walked in on a similar scene?
Something dreadful seems to have scarred their little psyches
Lacked a few things
Thanks Chillywilly,
Stick with it, we'll get there in Ch.02 et seq.
Re. Twentyseven's comment
I was scratching my head trying to figure out why he was so confused by a woman saying something like "wow, that was amazing" after sex. Then it occurred to me: maybe he's never heard that before!
;)
Lighten up, fellas. It's all in good fun.
Sorry @anony...
Sorry @anony...My mistake...You are the one that deserves to die and soon!!!
sorry
Cheating sluts are not erotic, just glad i didn't marry one.
Anonymous re: "and Back"
Thanks for your comment. How about registering so that my reply can be to a name rather than to one of many Anonymouses? (Or is the plural Anonymy?)
Indeed, coming back does happen, but it takes a while. I agree that there was no plot development in Ch.01, that happens in subsequent chapters. You may not agree with a teaser start before an author fills out the background, but that was the way I decided to do it for better or worse.
And I would like to think that some of your assumptions about size queen etc are somewhat wide of the mark. You were a bit quick perhaps in making those assumptions?
Good start, lets see how you explain how you came to be OK
with your extra marital sex. And how hubby became OK with it. I have a feeling he is another pervy fetishist that is driven to see his wife taken by a real man, but I could be wrong. That is just the usualbehavior for willing cucks-they get their unwilling wifes to try and then it's off to the races.
Be very interested to see your thoughts, and if you feel he loves you or views you as his personal porn star and an sexual object. Let us know honeslty if you lost any respect for him as a man and husband throughout the evolution of your reaching the point described in the story.
Thx and good writing!
Stick with it Patillie
Thanks Patillie,
Re your last comment, I'm not sure whether "good writing" was wishing me well for future chapters or a compliment on what I had already written. Either way, thanks.
And don't make too many assumptions about men who discover their wives have wandered. Some men take an intelligent and emotionally mature approach to the situation. And when you read the statistics on spouses who wander, a lot of people do have to consider their reaction -- wives as well as husbands.
My, my, my. It most certainly gets personal between commenters over here....
....like squabbling children, you are.
Ah, the story. Not my cup of tea, but well written, in a slightly disjoint sort of way.
So how does she handle it when one of the kids wakes up in the middle of the night and walks in on her illicit activity?
What about an early riser? I guess when we throw all the conventions to the wind, we walk away unprepared for eventualities.....
The saddest part about this is that she stays married to a man that obviouly is OK with her perfidy and is (apparently) unable to satisfy her. I wonder if the lack is really his or if she is far more experienced than we can know from this story alone...and married for love, instead of sex. I heard that most infidelity comes from this huge mistake. Marriage for love is a fools game and sooner or later everyone goes back to sex for the fun of it. No need for families, structure, trust or trustworthy behaviors, consistency, honor, honesty or any of that drivel....go get fucked by the biggest, fattest cock you can find as often as you can. Life is just more fun that way and you are ever so much happier.
Hubby will love you for it and any new babies will be his to worry about. And when you wrinkle and shrivel to a prune, hubby will still be there, faithfully supporting you forever.
Right. That all sounds so realistic. Just like your story is likely to happen, this crap will....but, arrest records suggest otherwise. This was grossly irresponsible writing and so unrealistic as to be a waste of time.
I won't be back...it's just too silly to waste time on.
re: Love you who hate annons
Hi anonymous,
It's not a matter of real names or unreal ones. This is a fantasy site so it's probably appropriate to have a fantasy name as well.
But it does make it easier to respond to a name rather than try to identify one of many anonymouses (anonymice?) in a reply.
Just another Cunt and a sissy husband story.
Pathetic!
Nicely written
and beautifully constructed. I look forward to reading more (and to seeing you annoy the Anons with the frothing mouths!) x
It's**
A read/
Liked the story
gave you a 5
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