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Fihish it please
well now that all the haters have had there say I would like you to write the second part because no one feels the story like the original writer does.
My 2 cents is I hope he don't take her back, but gets his kids. .either way thanks for your work
What Michael is doing
The DSS provides security for US diplomatic missions, US diplomats, and foreign dignitaries visiting the US. Michael is trying to get himself killed in the line of duty.
This is really nothing more than a prelude, it isn't even the beginning of a story.
Finish it!
Please!!!!
don't get it
While it is said that most people cheat down, she is described as beautiful.
So why would she be with a out of shape overweight loser?
Some job related prostitution?
Wanting others to finish this when it is an inadequate start?
Acttually, it's pretty quick and easy to finish
He can't live with his wife's whoring around, but if he divorces her his kids will become another effing LW cliche, children of a bitter divorce and a broken home, raised by a slut mother who they will turn against as they continue down a self destructive life path. But if he manages to die in the line of duty, their mother's sins will be buried and they'll be able to live proud as the children of a fallen hero. That's how much he's willing to sacrifice for them.
So in the he goes back home for one last visit during which he tells the kids he's on a top secret mission before he returns to the field only to return in a flag draped casket for a funeral with honors, or the slut realizes what he's planning and earns redemption by finding a way to off herself in an apparent accident so her kids can be raised by their faithful widower dad. The end.
michael and elizabeth
any white man who takes back a wife whom fucks a black man needed to be shot.
Imagination stimulated ..... to some degree
I can see the potential, but I am not excited about grading on potential. In my world it is results that count. Although I have never actually submitted a story - and have serious reservations about whether or not I have the appropriate skill to do so - from time-to-time I have been motivated by the skill of FTDS and his contemporaries to sketch out conclusions for unfinished stories or those which are left "hanging" with an ending so vague as to provide no resolution. I find the process similar to attempting to solve a skill word game. I sense what you have presented to begin the story of "Michael and Elizabeth" almost seems carefully designed (almost to a fault) to represent a very difficult and demanding skill game if one hopes to complete a reader acceptable and sensible outcome. Although I do anticipate anyone who reads your opening will read any and all completed stories which might materialize, certainly including your own conclusion.
Chagrined!
This was awful. Stick your head in shit!
No bitch I divorced you and the kids
When they turn into monsters it will be all your fault. You fuck some fat nigger in our bed and gives shit about cutting you lose. Here is a deal for you whore. You pay me support and give me the kids and promise never to see them again and I will handle things. Otherwise go get fucked, oh you already do that!
I THINK DYK
should assume author ship of this story, which has multiple ways to progress. TK U MLJ LV NV
any white man that lost his wife to a black man
should be thanked, it means he save another bored house wife from a life of being married to a dickless moron that's pissed off at being pissed on......lol
Chagrined
All i can say is that you did your name honour .......
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Really?
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