Michael and Elizabeth

Fihish it please

well now that all the haters have had there say I would like you to write the second part because no one feels the story like the original writer does.
My 2 cents is I hope he don't take her back, but gets his kids. .either way thanks for your work

What Michael is doing

The DSS provides security for US diplomatic missions, US diplomats, and foreign dignitaries visiting the US. Michael is trying to get himself killed in the line of duty.

This is really nothing more than a prelude, it isn't even the beginning of a story.

Finish it!

Please!!!!

don't get it

While it is said that most people cheat down, she is described as beautiful.
So why would she be with a out of shape overweight loser?
Some job related prostitution?

Wanting others to finish this when it is an inadequate start?

Acttually, it's pretty quick and easy to finish

He can't live with his wife's whoring around, but if he divorces her his kids will become another effing LW cliche, children of a bitter divorce and a broken home, raised by a slut mother who they will turn against as they continue down a self destructive life path. But if he manages to die in the line of duty, their mother's sins will be buried and they'll be able to live proud as the children of a fallen hero. That's how much he's willing to sacrifice for them.

So in the he goes back home for one last visit during which he tells the kids he's on a top secret mission before he returns to the field only to return in a flag draped casket for a funeral with honors, or the slut realizes what he's planning and earns redemption by finding a way to off herself in an apparent accident so her kids can be raised by their faithful widower dad. The end.

michael and elizabeth

any white man who takes back a wife whom fucks a black man needed to be shot.

Imagination stimulated ..... to some degree

I can see the potential, but I am not excited about grading on potential. In my world it is results that count. Although I have never actually submitted a story - and have serious reservations about whether or not I have the appropriate skill to do so - from time-to-time I have been motivated by the skill of FTDS and his contemporaries to sketch out conclusions for unfinished stories or those which are left "hanging" with an ending so vague as to provide no resolution. I find the process similar to attempting to solve a skill word game. I sense what you have presented to begin the story of "Michael and Elizabeth" almost seems carefully designed (almost to a fault) to represent a very difficult and demanding skill game if one hopes to complete a reader acceptable and sensible outcome. Although I do anticipate anyone who reads your opening will read any and all completed stories which might materialize, certainly including your own conclusion.

Chagrined!

This was awful. Stick your head in shit!

I THINK DYK

should assume author ship of this story, which has multiple ways to progress. TK U MLJ LV NV

any white man that lost his wife to a black man

should be thanked, it means he save another bored house wife from a life of being married to a dickless moron that's pissed off at being pissed on......lol

Chagrined

All i can say is that you did your name honour .......

1*

Really?

Publish your ending

You are one of the very best authors on this site. Finnish this for your Fans.

why did the black mam end up in bed with lizbeth ?? i would enjoy reading the rest..

does anyone followed the invite?

Hi Chagrined .....

I have waited to see if anyone would pick up this story, I'm not seeing any takers.

I thought you said you would finish this story, will you?

About this debate

Here were two comments about white wife with black lover.
First was the next:
"any white man who takes back a wife whom fucks a black man needed to be shot."

Second was the next:
"any white man that lost his wife to a black man should be thanked, it means he save another bored house wife from a life of being married to a dickless moron that's pissed off at being pissed on......lol"

Very interesting I read very very few stories where the cheating wives have black lovers and after divorce the black lovers will be step fathers for the broken families to help to bring up the kids!

I think the black men are not stupid and they apreciate these white wives to............(not good wife material, but with simplier words!)

Smells worse then a sewage treatment plant

Run- Don't walk!

Wonder how many sloppy seconds and cream pies, from her lover, he ingested? A whore and a slut, once having established themselves as such, will never change. The best course of action for him to take is to do a DNA test on the kids. And to test himself for any STDS. As for the wife, she's damaged goods and should be heaved overboard. No matter how beautiful and sexy she is. She's still a disrespectful whore!

Why?

Why would you post this open ended story? You were posting on this site, then you stopped. Then in February you posted this. You may not like the operators of this site, but frankly, you've cheated the readers. It won't affect my life, but what demons infect your soul?

This is a piss poor 'story', basically gives nothing for another 'writer' to work with, also says he'll finish it if no one else will. There wasn't even a START, this was barely a MIDDLE, so maybe when this so called writer pulls his head out of his ass and STARTS & FINISHES the damn story we might give a damn, cause FTDS has gone AWOL and won't finish his own stories there's no hope of this EVER being finished.

Sometimes it's best to stay away.

This is one of those times

Finish it!

You have an interesting start but you need to add more substance. Then you can provide an ending that you are happy with.
Your other stories were complete. Do you believe anyone else can adequately finish this story?

B.S.

Another so called writer that could finish a story if their life depended on it. Always an excuse why they couldn't or didn't finish what they started.

Whiner

I wonder why authors like you start whining about adverse comments before you have received them. Perhaps, it is because you know how stupid is your plot and how totally bereft of any relationship to human beings are your characters. I think of you as a reconciliation whore. Regardless of how egregious the adultery, how violent the reaction by cheated on spouse, the end will have a reconciliation because you want one rather that what your characters would do. So 1* with a great deal of satisfaction

Damn

I now know why I didn't read this when it first came out. Now I'll read the sequel.

Cheating

There are two things in affairs that I consider unforgivable, at least one of which happens here:

1) Doing things with lover that aren't done with the spouse.

2) Cheating in the marriage bed.

Pretty Shitty about leaving the children

Obviously the critic that thought it was shitty to leave the kids has not been through this scenario. Although I & my wife have reunited (and the kids turned out OK), at the time I could not emotionally bear to be around anything (including my kids) the reminded me of my wife's betrayal. It took 6-8 months of separation (and several one night stands) to begin to heal the pain.

That said.. looking forward to other authors response. 3-4 stars.

Finish the Damn Story!

- The husband walks into his bedroom and sees the love of his life being fucked by a BIG,out-of-shape black man. The END,of the marriage and the story!

Meh

“You wanted to divorce me, Michael, not your children. They should not have to pay for my mistake." – Fine, then give him custody!

Second Rate Story

Not even a good beginning...

Gawd I hope no one bothers with this pathetic excerpt and lets it die.

That is a dick move. Just write a few paragraphs of trite overworked shite and then "challenge" others to finish it.

If you can't finish the fucking thing, don't start it.

Interesting

Your invitation to continue this should get my lazy ass to try a stab at writing. Man, the BTB crowd is tough. You explained this was a tease and still you get bombed.

It is

Already finished... no life left in either carcass

hate it

you fucking writers who do this are chicken shit worthless monkey spunk bet your ass i will ignor your stupid untalented bs in the future

Unfortunately...

You give an aspiring finisher nothing with which to work: we don't know your characters. We know Elizabeth is sorry (for something), and Michael loves her. That's it. Might as well start from scratch.

for you to start

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Really weak

Why would any writer leave a story to other to finish???? That is just lazy, this is baseball, no relief writer in the bullpen....... 2**** for what could have been a good story....

im a really lazy rubbish writer

finish it your fucking self.
read the rest of my stories, they may or may not have an ending but why should i care if you waste your time reading them only to dicover theres no ending.