I give up, there is no hope for your writing.Stop now and keep from shaming yourself anymore.
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Anonymous03/01/15
I love your style
I really enjoy reading your pieces. They're brilliant, funny, sexy and very smart. Please continue.
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Anonymous03/03/15
Too much.
I understand you are trying to be sexy with the English language but it totally distracts from the actual content. Too many descriptions that take away from what you are trying to describe. It makes it lose all sex appeal. You have a good idea but as I said, too much!
Why do you end each sentence with a question and write the same thing twice? Examples his giant cock AND penis. Does he have two? Sounds like this was originally in a different language and was translated through a crappy free online translator. "Don't you and yourself perpetuate and perceive the same way?"
English
I give up
I give up, there is no hope for your writing.Stop now and keep from shaming yourself anymore.
I love your style
I really enjoy reading your pieces. They're brilliant, funny, sexy and very smart. Please continue.
Too much.
I understand you are trying to be sexy with the English language but it totally distracts from the actual content. Too many descriptions that take away from what you are trying to describe. It makes it lose all sex appeal. You have a good idea but as I said, too much!
huuuuh?
Why do you end each sentence with a question and write the same thing twice? Examples his giant cock AND penis. Does he have two? Sounds like this was originally in a different language and was translated through a crappy free online translator. "Don't you and yourself perpetuate and perceive the same way?"
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