Vegas Get Together

Two awful stories in a row

A new low in LW. UGH!

Grammar!

I would only say that a move from past to present tense jarred somewhat. But the actual story was fun, and it didn't make the mistake of rushing to the main event. I always think that a slow buildup is the best, so the reader can get into the story properly (and the mood!). Write more.

Have no bitches. It was a very good read.

Well written, but....

Well written, but it's only that! A writer describing a sexual act, as another writer would describe a match or a play...We don't feel real people, real feelings...maybe a better thing to be done, was the writer to have chosen to put here one of the stories he sent to this couple!!

sluts and cucks.

This is your wife, your soul mate, the mother of your kids, good luck.