Thanks for writing the end! You had many of us hanging on waiting the outcome!
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Anonymous03/06/15
Good story -- give more "honor" to a good blow job.
This was a good story. Well written, in general. Held my interest. You did one thing that surprised me, which will sound petty, but I write from experience and from a man's viewpoint.
I'm afraid you may have underestimated the pure joy of being with a lover -- especially a "new" lover -- and she takes your cock in her mouth and sucks on it until you come, and then swallows your juice and moves on to fucking you -- if, I say, you have had that experience, I should think you would make more of an "occasion" over it in your story than you did. Twice she sucked him off to a climax, and you sloughed over it as though it were no big thing. I think you should have given it more acknowledgement than you did. My only "complaint."
English
Good finish!!!
Thanks for writing the end! You had many of us hanging on waiting the outcome!
Good story -- give more "honor" to a good blow job.
This was a good story. Well written, in general. Held my interest. You did one thing that surprised me, which will sound petty, but I write from experience and from a man's viewpoint.
I'm afraid you may have underestimated the pure joy of being with a lover -- especially a "new" lover -- and she takes your cock in her mouth and sucks on it until you come, and then swallows your juice and moves on to fucking you -- if, I say, you have had that experience, I should think you would make more of an "occasion" over it in your story than you did. Twice she sucked him off to a climax, and you sloughed over it as though it were no big thing. I think you should have given it more acknowledgement than you did. My only "complaint."
Karma
Is a bitch. And always has been. Great Story. Thanks.....
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