I think your use of the word virago is misplaced as it refers to (and this is a copied and pasted definition) "a domineering, violent, or bad-tempered woman.
"that virago of a wife of his needs locking up"
synonyms: harridan, shrew, dragon, termagant, vixen.
archaic
a woman of masculine strength or spirit; a female warrior."
Please don't take my critisim the wrong way I'm really happy you have returned.
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Anonymous03/17/15
Story line got me hooked
Keep going! It gets better as you go. If I were to make a suggestion it would be add more depth to your sex scenes. They have a beginning and an end. You need more middle. Can't wait to next chapter! Please don't leave us hanging, or quit!
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Enjoyed the backstory but
I think your use of the word virago is misplaced as it refers to (and this is a copied and pasted definition) "a domineering, violent, or bad-tempered woman.
"that virago of a wife of his needs locking up"
synonyms: harridan, shrew, dragon, termagant, vixen.
archaic
a woman of masculine strength or spirit; a female warrior."
Please don't take my critisim the wrong way I'm really happy you have returned.
Story line got me hooked
Keep going! It gets better as you go. If I were to make a suggestion it would be add more depth to your sex scenes. They have a beginning and an end. You need more middle. Can't wait to next chapter! Please don't leave us hanging, or quit!
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