...now it needs another chapter! This was a good read. Hope you decide to continue it.
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Anonymous03/05/15
Mainly OK but......
......this has to be the most stupid paragraph written here in a while.
""With all that baby-making juice?" Judy held me close and nodded. My regret was short-lived once I understood what she was feeling. "Here it comes!" I told her. I stopped trying to hold back. I blew my balls inside her beautiful pussy. I straightened my hips so my sperm would have a straight shot into her womb."
Baby-making juice! How stupid.
English
Good start...
...now it needs another chapter! This was a good read. Hope you decide to continue it.
Mainly OK but......
......this has to be the most stupid paragraph written here in a while.
""With all that baby-making juice?" Judy held me close and nodded. My regret was short-lived once I understood what she was feeling. "Here it comes!" I told her. I stopped trying to hold back. I blew my balls inside her beautiful pussy. I straightened my hips so my sperm would have a straight shot into her womb."
Baby-making juice! How stupid.
Shout-out
Much of that paragraph was lifted from a suggestion made in a comment on another story. That phrase was a shout-out to him.
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