I dont wish to be harsh, but you need an education in BDSM. This reads as a noncon or straight out abuse story. Any sub in a relationship without safewords or consent with a dom who is barely in control of his rage should run, not walk, away.
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Anonymous03/03/15
Terrible
There is nothing erotic about a fist to the face. This is not bdsm, this is abuse.
WOW instead of bdsm you have discribed a clear case on abuse and domestic violence , If she had a brain she would report him and send him to jail....she didnt even talk to the guy...she stood there
by
Anonymous03/03/15
Pure, unadulterated violence
Nothing erotic, interesting or entertaining about this. Just awful.
by
Anonymous03/03/15
this is not bdsm, this is abuse. really wish i could unread it.
this is not bdsm, this is abuse. really wish i could unread it.
by
Anonymous03/03/15
Concerning Point Of View
As a practicing Dom, I found this to be very unlike situations in which I have gotten into. This reads almost like a nonconforming / fantasy rape type situation. The Dom (s) I associate with insist on play being safe for the sub, yet the situation described here is very distant from being safe. The emotion is raw, and even that mad, I would refrain from punishment until I could approach it cool headed. Hopefully this is an unrealized fantasy situation. Safe, sane, loving... that's what it should be, not abusive.
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Anonymous03/04/15
As a 24/7 submissive to a soldier, this story was horribly upsetting to read. Not only is this not true BDSM as is does not follow a safe, sane, and consensual guideline as every BDSM relationship (I have ever seen) does, it also gives soldier like my Dom a bad reputation, especially in the vanilla world. I hope the author can become more educated on bdsm before writing another story and perhaps be more considerate as to the stereotypes they have written about here.
Also in reference to a previous comment; my Dominant and I do not use safewords. But that is not something that is recommended for everyone. We only do it because after 7yrs, he knows me so well, he knows my body language, the look in my eyes, my breathing, my voice and even my moans. He knows when I have had enough and knows that if he were to do something that were too hard or painful to me, not only will he have hurt me badly, but in someone else's words "broken toys are never as much fun to play with"!
I hope this story can be a lesson to anyone who reads it. I believe that in this case, it is abuse. But ultimately that is something that the two involved would determine. But is should only be done if it is in a fantasy scene, if even then. It is consensual/non consent.
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Anonymous03/06/15
This isn't bdsm, this is rape
While the writer has a very good grasp of technical pacing, phrasing and grammar, the lack of knowledge displayed about the subject matter is both alarming and distasteful. This is domestic violence, abuse and rape, not bdsm. This woman is violated and abused with no thought to her consent or safety - I have never encountered a real dom or master who would treat their subs or slaves like that - this is a horrific and inaccurate portrayal of bdsm play that paints a bad image over all of us.
And, if this is anywhere near a true accounting, get out now. Call the police, go to a hospital and report him for rape, because that's what you just wrote about.
Thank you for the feedback. It is very interesting that many comments state that this is not traditional BDSM and that may be true to an extent. But I must make the point that what turns on one submissive may be more violent and extreme than another. Just as everyone has their own likes and dislikes in their BDSM relationship, this fantasy may have been one of mine. Even if it was real it would have been in the consent and boundaries of a safe relationship where such role play and behavior is accepted.
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Anonymous03/06/15
Author
Your response frames this as just a rougher style that turns some subs on. Yes, some people like rougher encounters than others. If that was what you intended to portray then you left important things out. Nothing indicates the sub enjoys this treatment, in fact just the opposite. There is fear, pain, nausea and more fear from the sub. Nothing positive or even reluctantly erotic from her. From the dom there is anger and violence. And more anger and violence. No care. No concern.
If you want your story to demonstrate specific feelings you must state them or give something from which they may be inferred. You can't assume the readers get the backstory you have in your mind. Most readers takes stories at face value.
That disgusted me. I can only assume he tries to bully his fellow soldiers and fails miserably. All I can see is an insecure asshole of an excuse for a man. Stick this in non con and you might get a better reaction, but for here you will get deserved pelters.
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Anonymous03/10/15
hot!
your stories are so hot to me, and perfectly wild and exactly what I want to read about!
English
not bdsm
I dont wish to be harsh, but you need an education in BDSM. This reads as a noncon or straight out abuse story. Any sub in a relationship without safewords or consent with a dom who is barely in control of his rage should run, not walk, away.
Terrible
There is nothing erotic about a fist to the face. This is not bdsm, this is abuse.
abuse
WOW instead of bdsm you have discribed a clear case on abuse and domestic violence , If she had a brain she would report him and send him to jail....she didnt even talk to the guy...she stood there
Pure, unadulterated violence
Nothing erotic, interesting or entertaining about this. Just awful.
this is not bdsm, this is abuse. really wish i could unread it.
this is not bdsm, this is abuse. really wish i could unread it.
Concerning Point Of View
As a practicing Dom, I found this to be very unlike situations in which I have gotten into. This reads almost like a nonconforming / fantasy rape type situation. The Dom (s) I associate with insist on play being safe for the sub, yet the situation described here is very distant from being safe. The emotion is raw, and even that mad, I would refrain from punishment until I could approach it cool headed. Hopefully this is an unrealized fantasy situation. Safe, sane, loving... that's what it should be, not abusive.
As a 24/7 submissive to a soldier, this story was horribly upsetting to read. Not only is this not true BDSM as is does not follow a safe, sane, and consensual guideline as every BDSM relationship (I have ever seen) does, it also gives soldier like my Dom a bad reputation, especially in the vanilla world. I hope the author can become more educated on bdsm before writing another story and perhaps be more considerate as to the stereotypes they have written about here.
Also in reference to a previous comment; my Dominant and I do not use safewords. But that is not something that is recommended for everyone. We only do it because after 7yrs, he knows me so well, he knows my body language, the look in my eyes, my breathing, my voice and even my moans. He knows when I have had enough and knows that if he were to do something that were too hard or painful to me, not only will he have hurt me badly, but in someone else's words "broken toys are never as much fun to play with"!
I hope this story can be a lesson to anyone who reads it. I believe that in this case, it is abuse. But ultimately that is something that the two involved would determine. But is should only be done if it is in a fantasy scene, if even then. It is consensual/non consent.
This isn't bdsm, this is rape
While the writer has a very good grasp of technical pacing, phrasing and grammar, the lack of knowledge displayed about the subject matter is both alarming and distasteful. This is domestic violence, abuse and rape, not bdsm. This woman is violated and abused with no thought to her consent or safety - I have never encountered a real dom or master who would treat their subs or slaves like that - this is a horrific and inaccurate portrayal of bdsm play that paints a bad image over all of us.
And, if this is anywhere near a true accounting, get out now. Call the police, go to a hospital and report him for rape, because that's what you just wrote about.
Interesting
Thank you for the feedback. It is very interesting that many comments state that this is not traditional BDSM and that may be true to an extent. But I must make the point that what turns on one submissive may be more violent and extreme than another. Just as everyone has their own likes and dislikes in their BDSM relationship, this fantasy may have been one of mine. Even if it was real it would have been in the consent and boundaries of a safe relationship where such role play and behavior is accepted.
Author
Your response frames this as just a rougher style that turns some subs on. Yes, some people like rougher encounters than others. If that was what you intended to portray then you left important things out. Nothing indicates the sub enjoys this treatment, in fact just the opposite. There is fear, pain, nausea and more fear from the sub. Nothing positive or even reluctantly erotic from her. From the dom there is anger and violence. And more anger and violence. No care. No concern.
If you want your story to demonstrate specific feelings you must state them or give something from which they may be inferred. You can't assume the readers get the backstory you have in your mind. Most readers takes stories at face value.
As an ex serviceman
That disgusted me. I can only assume he tries to bully his fellow soldiers and fails miserably. All I can see is an insecure asshole of an excuse for a man. Stick this in non con and you might get a better reaction, but for here you will get deserved pelters.
hot!
your stories are so hot to me, and perfectly wild and exactly what I want to read about!
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