April 1st

Vintage DG Hear

A DG Hear story is like an old, overstuffed leather chair, comfortable and predictable. His stories are kind of formulaic, but they're always well-written, with a minimum of typos and other editing errors, and they feature main characters that are exceedingly likable. This one is no exception.

i really like real loving wives stories

very well done

See Your Name

Read your story.

It's simple really. You deliver quality every time!

Thanks!

Alan

APRIL 1ST A GOOD DAY

and only 14 days until IRS time. TK U MLJ LV NV

Excellent

As someone already mentioned, you write and share "quality" stories. I enjoy a good romantic tale where the characters are well defined and they are real. Thank you again for this submission

Ed

Another Great Story

Love all your stories. Thanks for another great read

I respect Kayla's Mom.

I made sure my daughter's dates knew that what my daughter said didn't matter. I didn't care if she begged him for it; he was dead meat if he touched her inappropriately. Even though she was on the same page as me on this subject; knowing that I was willing to go to prison to protect her chastity made it much easier for her to stick to her guns and remain a virgin until her wedding day. She said I was right; it was a lot easier to know she was in love without sex confusing the issue; also, the players wouldn't go near her, leaving the guys that actually liked her for herself in her dating pool.

How do you keep pulling these out of your pen

Thanks for sharing

Two years on...

...and your mother-in-law is still 'Mrs. Davis'? Great story, thanks for sharing it.

Great Romance with a Fun Twist

DGH stories make a person smile. If you read one and aren't smiling by the end, you are comatose. Well done once again! Five stars aren't enough.

Wonderful story

It's really wonderful finding a nice story such as this one. Such good stories are as rare as finding a diamond in the rough. Keep your stories coming. 5 stars.

Excellent storytelling

Nice story well told. Just a couple of things; Why did Kayla's parents leave her unsupervised with her date on Prom night? Surely they must have suspected what would happen. Secondly, Rob already had condoms, he knew what to expect.

Loved it. Thanks for sharing your story with us!😃

Good Read***

Thanks for sharing.

Not a ad plot

... but it was all tell, not show. With this being a contest entry, I'm sorry I couldn't give more that's 3 stars.

Thanks for the entry!

VisualPerv

Good. Even very good,

could be better.

DG I'll be as honest as I can here. and these are my opinions. As far as your writing goes, it's top notch. Your narrative is very good, dialog is not bad at all. Story concept was...well not original, but a high school sweetheart romantic story does really happen...so certainly a plausible story idea. But...

Critique: I feel like I've just eaten a huge bowl of vanilla ice cream. Vanilla is a great flavor. Simple, wonderfully sweet, delicious but by the bottom of the huge bowl you began to get a bit tired of vanilla. This story had that feel, it was the same flavor through out. I was waiting for a "something" that never happened, never appeared.

One of the most powerful things a writer has in his arsenal is human emotion. We must emotionally manipulate the reader, awaken them, anger them, quicken their hearts and bring tears to the eyes. That is doubly true of erotica writers, since we have to do all of those and get them aroused as well.

This was a very romantic tale, easily believable but I was waiting for the passion, the fire to awaken between them...maybe some family,( or better yet a personal) tragedy to pull them back together. Sigh.

It's the only thing I saw that you needed to work on, everything else you have. Find the fire, find the heat to bring your stories to a boil and you will easily be a top writer. Not just of Literotica.

Good work. Really, good work. Now go get some candy sprinkles and chocolate sauce or something. Lol.

MST

Too few letter "o"s in the story

The story was good (4, not 5 stars), but there were too few letters omitted. Perhaps a rereading (or a search for "to") would lead to more "too much" (and other similar phrases) and less "to much" in this story. Also, their popped out inappropriately.

Better luck on your next effort. :-)

Great Story !

I can't tell you how great it is to read your stories, thank God you write here, most enjoyable---ignore the nit pickers, it's the content that counts--I would give you a 10 if it were available
Thanks,
Sam

*****

Very sweet love story, not perfect but a very satisfying read.

Nicely incorporates the April Fool's theme too.

Five stars

very nice

loved it, unfortunately, doesn't happen too much in real life.

A good effort

but a trifle 'rushed' so to speak.
Such a pity that the pretty ones are not like Kayla. . . .
HP

Good Story

I liked the story, but I agree with Anonymous that you need more editing before posting.

Romance is Not Usually My Category

But I really enjoyed this story. It was short and well constructed.
Thanks DGHear!
Please keep writing! Love your work!

Well Told! 5*

It's refreshing to read of a 1st time with romance. Slam, Bam, Thank You Ma'am has it's place, but variety is the SPICE of LIFE!

Looking forward to more!

well done

story. You have a knack of writing good stories in almost any category

good but could have been great....

This was a pretty good story, but have never understood why people have to always dampen the mood in the story with a condom. I know its smart to use protection but it's a fantasy story for goodness sakes. Condoms do nothing in a story like this but take away the closeness and erotic feeling to what could have been an even better story. 4 stars, could've been 5.

Bravo!

Wonderful! Excellent! Outstanding! ~ I guess that just about sums it up!

Nice story.

One of My Favorites!

I've commented on this story before but,with time it has become one of my top 5 favorites on literotica.com.
Another,kind of similar is,"Tears On My Face" by Cat5. https://www.literotica.com/s/tears-on-my-face

Nice story

But the prose is robotic

Thank you...

for writing us the story!😁👏

Duh

A total crap story. Mo

Yada, Yada, Yada..........

Oh yea, like they really fell in love in so short a time...what a bunch of BS.

thanks for writing such a nice love story

good people who care about each other.

I just wish the dialogue was more conversational. It sounds like a story written by Data from Star Trek TNG, a bit stiff and way too formal.

mostly you write good stories

then some are dire....this is somewhere in between...