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by Anonymous

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by bigmud81903/04/15

story is fine

I like the story, but poor English is distracting. Hope you get an editor before part 2.

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by Anonymous03/05/15

Needs an editor

Spelling, typos, lots of errors to distract. And, we can tell it's just a fantasy as much of it is geometrically improbable.

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