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Amazing!
Bookmarking this. Can't wait for more.
Bring on the Expansion!
Your writing style has finesse and a consistency of pace that makes it very easy to read. The repeated adjectives don't add much, but the similes most certainly do; I think this is the first time I've ever seen something compared to peanut butter!
I like the main character too. Muscle women who embrace their own femininity are rare in fiction, and I'd love to see how this demoness relates to the world she's in. (I get the sense that, even in a demon city, she's still a rebel in some ways.)
If this does indeed turn out to be a series, it's off to a good start, and a plot with some character interaction will be just what it needs to keep that momentum.
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