... that I found. Other than that I liked your initial effort. The mistake did not detract from your tale at all. In fact, I appreciate your efforts and would like to read more of your writings.
The error occurs in the fourth paragraph's last line. I believe that "birds flying overheard" should be birds flying overhead. If I am wrong, I hope that you accept my apology.
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Very Nice!
I like this a lot. Let's see some more.
Only one error ...
... that I found. Other than that I liked your initial effort. The mistake did not detract from your tale at all. In fact, I appreciate your efforts and would like to read more of your writings.
The error occurs in the fourth paragraph's last line. I believe that "birds flying overheard" should be birds flying overhead. If I am wrong, I hope that you accept my apology.
You are a naughty girl.
Tall tree's and bushes don't often sheild you from your own drive.
really hot!!
Im usually not into the whole slapping around thing but that was really well done. Good job and keep writing!
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