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suck
Horrible lame story just stop and go to another story that you abandoned started of great but now its just getting worse and worse
damn
You let go of savannah for this shit damn bad move man bad move
idiots shut up
to the previous to people commenting. kindly shut the F!#* up. if you don't like the story don't read it. while it is different from frozenhero1 previous works it is still a good story that has me wanting to try and write again and that is a rare gift. to frozenhero1 thank you it is a very good story and im quite interested in seeing how it plays out.
It Has Been Awhile...
This chapter of the series is like those inbetween issues of the comics where not a whole lot happens but there is some tweaking of plotlines and a bit of character development. The most interesting part was Apollo meeting Penelope's mother. And, yes, older women can be considered beautiful, too, like a fine bottle of chianti or scotch. The subplot with Master Disaster teaming up with Leviathan and Two-Fold does not bode well for our super-powered couple. And there is the curiosity of what Hermes is going to find out about Penelope's origins with the help of Hecate. A lot of questions but not a lot of answers...enough to keep me interested, for now.
By the bye, I have finally looked at your biographical data. You write a lot better than a lot of the stuff I read here in Literotica. I, too, only have a High School level education when it comes to grammar and such, but I was my wife's editor on all of her college papers and she always received good marks. Writing is an art that some people are good at and others are not, as with any other kind of artistic endeavor. Don't let the nay-sayers get you down (Those that write, write. Those that cannot become critics. I'm paraphrasing, of course). Perhaps I may take a look at some of your other series.
Until next time...
Roger.
keep going bro
i am in love with the comic vibe,when i read this i feel like i'm reading an actual comic. while i'm not your biggest fan with on what direction you've taken with the some characters i'm going to stick with you and this story to the very end.
Don't stop !
So far so good
So far so good. But I'd have expected Travis to make a clean break, tell Penny to find another lab partner. After all, who wants to be friend-zoned?
Agree
Not a big fan of what you are doing with the characters too, the story is good. I think you made a lot of mistakes with the plot. . The path you chose was easy, too easy for a,writer of your caliber.
Unless there is something else along the horizon, like Travis or Jordan becoming super, this will become mundane and not follow your stories title.
Good luck and I have my fingers crossed
i like it,but
the way this chapter ended was slightly annoying...i was like"what....thats it,more massage oil?" i am a huge fan of your writing good sir,i am expecting more good things from you in the future,also....if things are going the way i think...i am hoping in my perverted mind that penny and apollo are brother and sister....simple reason being...i dislike apollo intensely in this story and want to see him taken down to one degree or another
I'm Diggin it
You know, i was like allot of folks who read this in that i didn't care for the direction it was going after Travis turned out to be a bit of yancy and dumped her, but i gotta say this chapter has turned me around on that. I also disliked Apollo at first as he came across as a bit of a meathead but he has grown on me. He seems less obnoxiously macho and more like someone who has just had 3000 years to get to know himself and has been utterly unchallenged by any serious force for most of that time. His bad level of ass whooping ability isnt really bragging, its just kinda been how its gone until now. Really diggin the story, love what your doing and cannot wait to read more
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