Very good story, but rushed. Interested to see what happens next
Good story if you need help feel free to ask
Really? I thought it was far too rushed with minimal build up.
Yes, very arousing story ..... now that Janet has blown James and they had sex; they need to now take the time to really go at it longer and do more. Its obvious, she is as much turned on to him as he is to her. This should be really interesting ........ Thanks !!
Adolescent twaddle. Either get an experienced editor, or wait a couple more years before you post here again.
Probably, the most amateurish piece of crap I ever read. This sounds like your personal fantasy. Stick to jerking off.
Seduction part was Fucking nice... But the fucking part could have been even more better
For someone new to writing, I could see promise. Keep working at it. I would suggest getting a 'proof reader'.
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Very good story, but rushed. Interested to see what happens next
Hekp
Good story if you need help feel free to ask
re: I know this was a lot of build up
Really? I thought it was far too rushed with minimal build up.
Yes, very arousing story ..... now that Janet has blown James and they had sex; they need to now take the time to really go at it longer and do more.
Its obvious, she is as much turned on to him as he is to her.
This should be really interesting ........ Thanks !!
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Adolescent twaddle. Either get an experienced editor, or wait a couple more years before you post here again.
Are you kidding.?
Probably, the most amateurish piece of crap I ever read. This sounds like your personal fantasy. Stick to jerking off.
Seduction part was Fucking nice... But the fucking part could have been even more better
A voice of intelligence
For someone new to writing, I could see promise. Keep working at it. I would suggest getting a 'proof reader'.
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